The Memory Package

As soon as I opened the front door, I saw a package laying 1* on the tea table in the living room.
"Is that the package?" I was wondering.
"What's that package?" I asked rhetorically.
"Don't you know what's in that package?" Mum asked me back.
I held the package carefully and walked into my room, tare2* the wrapper by a small knife.
A whole box of chocolates, four CDs, a scarf, and a card with words all written in capital letters.
It's a scarf with3* special tartan, related to someone's family name (His, of course).
I smelled the scarf, it had a familiar scent of one specific perfume called "Obsession"
I've been waiting4* for the package for so long and finally received it. I thought I would never have it.
It recalls all the wonderful memory5*.

1* lying- to lay is a different verb which is transitive. To lay the table, to lay a blanket on the ground,etc.

2* past of tear is 'tore'. Also tore would usually have a negative meaning to indicate an accident. Better 'tore open', or maybe 'tore off' The preposition is 'with' not 'by'. But if you use a knife I think 'cut open' or 'cut off' would be better. Tear is more with your fingers.

3* Becuase it is specific and known I think you need an article 'a specific tartan'

4* Previous past. -past perfect - I had been waiting for.

5* With 'all' better in plural -memories.

Lovely content well done. I have 3 tartans in my family from my Scottish ancestors

The Memory Package

As soon as I opened the front door, I saw a package laying on the tea table in the living room.
"Is that the package?" I was wondering.
"What's that package?" I asked rhetorically.
"Don't you know what's in that package?" Mum asked me back.
I held the package carefully and walked into my room, tared the wrapper by a small knife.
A whole box of chocolates, four CDs, a scarf, and a card with words all written in capital letters.
It's a scarf with special tartan, related to someone's family name (His, of course).
I smelled the scarf, it had a familiar scent of one specific perfume called "Obsession"
I've been waiting for the package for so long and finally received it. I thought I would never have it.
It recalls all the wonderful memory.