Fairytale
I've waited for your eyes a hundred years
I've never felt this passion so high and forgot to breathe.
I'm panting with my pain when you walk away.
Please, darling, take me, take me to your fairytale.
To your fairyland.
Our story will never end.
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A Fairytale
From the way you indent and putting a new sentence on a different line, I assume that this is a poem. So I am going to correct in a poetic style.
For a hundred years, I've waited for your eyes [to feast] upon my eyes. a hundred years
I've Never felt this passion so high feveredly and that I forget to breathe now and then.
I'm panting with my In stabbing pain I was, when you walked away.
Please, my darling;
Take me!
Take me to your fairytale;
To your fairyland...
So that our story will never end.
Nice.
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