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I watched an American’s TV series called Carrie Diaries. Carrie’ Diary, There are some impressive movie lines: as following.

“When my power is pure and young, I am foolish, I sold my power. Never let others make your decisions, own your power. ”

“Everyone may think it is a good idea, but I don’t. That’s me owning my power.”

“If I didn’t define who I was and what I wanted, somebody else would.”

I like these sentences. In this busy and fast world, we must find ourselves who we are, rather than ask others,. They are not the worms in our stomachs and in most cases, they would likely to give you a hasty or false answer, for to destroying the confidence of potential competitors., at the Meanwhile, they insist, as the sophisticated and experienced experts, that what they said is authoritative and completely right without any doubt.

Hi, 

So you have a few mistakes here and there, but not bad. However, your original sentence, beginning with "in this busy and fast world...", was extremely long and is called a run-on sentence. These types of sentences are considered incorrect. Also, you never mentioned what or who "they" is referring to when you said "they are not the worms in our stomachs...".

:D 

I'd like correct only a sentence, reflecting Ms Shannontron' recommendation.

I like these sentences. In this Even if we live in a busy and fast world, we must find ourselves who we are, rather than ask others. They are  Other people are not the worms in our stomachs and in most cases, they would like to might give you a hasty or false answer, for to destroying the confidence of potential competitors. the world.

But, there are two others: "Ask others" and "Other people are". Then, is original sentence better(?)

You must get the confidence of "the world", not "potentential competitors."

Carrie’ Diary

I watched a American’s TV series Carrie’ Diary, there are some impressive movie lines as following.

“When my power is pure and young, I am foolish, I sold my power. Never let others make your decisions, own your power. ”

“Everyone may think it is a good idea, but I don’t. That’s me owning my power.”

“If I didn’t define who I was and what I wanted, somebody else would.”

I like these sentences. In this busy and fast world, we must find ourselves who we are, rather than ask others, they are not the worms in our stomachs, in most cases, they would like to give you a hasty or false answer, for destroying the confidence of potential competitors, at the meanwhile they insist, as the sophisticated and experienced experts, what they said is authoritative and completely right without any doubt.

i know exactly what are u gonna to express, and there are no problems in grammar,words. but its still chinese english, i didnt mean any offense,thats my opinion~