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The great person I love
Steve Jobs, a great man, founded the Apple Computer, Inc. I think that he do not know I don't think he knows how to get along with his friends and other people persons. Without question, Steve loves his family and friends. He love his children. When his life was ending going to end, he told almost almost told everything important about his life to the writer who would write the book "Steve Jobs". Because he was is a busy man, he could not see accompany his children frequently. But he loved his children, he wanted his children to know that what was he like, and why he was so focussed on his career. He loved his job, and he was is a man who pursued perfection. He hoped that the natural beauty could can be added into his their products.Thus,he can created the greatest computer products.
This is very good! These were only a few, minor errors. I can tell that you understand English well.
I just made some changes with the tense. Because he is no longer alive, I changed a lot of it into the past tense. Well done for a good peice
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