Essay for the internship

I'm writing essays(?) for my internship. I would appreciate it if you could correct them. It's too long so I divided them into two posts.

1.
I have been studying business English using TOEIC text books, and trying to read books or articles on the internet which are written in English. I also use Youtube to improve my listening skills, at the same time I while learning about American culture.
Besides In addition to this, I am brushing up on my design skills. ("brushing up" is correct but a bit informal) I mainly have been doing web design so far, but at the internship I will be in charge of advertising design, booth design, and some CAD skill will be required as well, so I am practicing those things to enable me to adopt to the broad range of tasks needed(←幅広い業務 に対応出来るように、と言いたい). (I think this is what you want to say, but my Japanese isn't that good :-))

2.
I would like to grasp the extent of what is required during the initial period. I will be accepted as a trainee who is responsible for many types of design work, so at first I will identify my role.

3.
I do not have enough experience of working in a team and I have scheduled almost everything by myself until now, so I will try to get used to working in a team during this period. I will try to contribute to the team with a positive attitude.


[Is this the proper answer for the question:
Please describe what skills and knowledge you hope to gain during each of the following stages of your training in the U.S? ; Please include how you will attain these goals:
"Through rotations through several departments and/or research work" ?]
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4.
Since the host company does a wide range of business, I think it is important to understand the business of other departments. At the moment, I am doing some general work beside just design. That's why I want to be proactive about learning the business of other departments proactively and hope to improving my business skills.

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good work! If you could please help me with my Japanese, I would appreciate it! ありがとう！

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[Is this the proper answer for the question:
Please describe what skills and knowledge you hope to gain during each of the following stages of your training in the U.S? ; Please include how you will attain these goals:
"Through rotations through several departments and/or research work" ?] (I don't think this is the answer they are looking for. Always use complete sentences when answering these types of questions, it will help you understand what they are asking. For example, the question here you would answer like this: "During the stages of my training in the U.S., I hope to gain..." and then you would give your answer, which would list the skills and knowledge you hope to gain. Then, for the second part of the question, you would say "I hope to attain these goals by..." and then you would use the answer you have written down already. I would say: "...through rotations rotating through several departments and/or and doing research work." Of course, this part of the answer also depends on what you have said in the first part. Research work may not be related at all to what you said when they asked you about your goals. So in the end, the answer would look something like this: "During the stages of my training in the U.S., I hope to gain _____, _____, and _____. I hope to attain these goals by ______, ______, and _____.")

4. Since the host company does a wide range of business, I think it is important to understand the business of other work done in all of its departments. At the moment, I am have been asked to do some general job beside designing works (this needs to be more specific-- find out the actual job title instead of saying "some general job." When you say that and you also say "besides designing works," it comes across as rude to the company), so I will try to learn the business of other departments proactively and in the process hope to improve my business skill.

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[You say "try" a lot. Please don't do this. When writing to an employer or teacher it is better to simply say "I will", because trying is not good enough. This was very well written, and the mistakes you made are mistakes that some native speakers also make. The corrections I made were mostly on sentence structure, and are intended to improve the clarity of what you are trying to express. I made a big effort to make everything sound professional. I could probably help more if I saw the questions you were answering. Best of luck to you.]

Essay for the internship

*my notes to you are in blue

*corrections are in pink

I'm writing essays("essays," is correct!) for my internship. I would appreciate it if you could correct them. It's too long so I divided into two posts.

1. I have been studying business English using TOEIC text books (for how long? I think that is worth mentioning right here- "I have been studying business English using TOEIC text books for ___ years,), and trying to reading English books or and articles on the internet which are written in English. I also use Youtube (how much? you could say "frequently," here- "I also frequently use Youtube...") to improve my listening skill, at the same time I which helps me learn more about American culture.
Besides (improper use of the word "besides") Meanwhile, I am brushing up on my design skills. I mainly have doing done web designing so far, but at the internship I will be in charge of advertising design, booth designing, and some CAD skill will be required as well, so I am practicing those these things skills to enable me to adopt to the broad works(←幅広い業務 に対応出来るように、と言いたい OK, got it. What you were meaning to say is "a wider range of business," but in this case I think what you wanted to communicate is that you are practicing your skills to enable you to support a wider range of business, as opposed to adopt a wider range of business. May I suggest that instead you say "...so I am practicing these skills to enable me to reach a higher level of ease and familiarity so that I am able to adapt to a wider range of positions to support the company,"?).

2. I would like to get a firm grasp on the range of my work during the initial internship period. I will be accepted as a trainee who is responsible for many types of design work, so at first I will I would first like to identify my role in the company.

3. I do not have enough very much experience of working in a team, and I have scheduled almost everything things by myself until now,. so I will try need to get used to working in team during this period. I will try to contribute for to the team with a positive attitude (maybe here you could add "and mindful work ethic.")