dear friends please help me to correct

Hi, dear friends. i was born in Hongdong, a little city in Shanxi province. Shanxi is in the northwest of China and its provincial capital city is taiyuan, which is in the north of our county. I have lived in there (in Taiyuan) for four years since from 2007, and it is has been a good time, because I spent the whole four years in the college student accommodation at university.

Dear friends please help me to correct

Hi, Dear friends. I [英文的我定要用大寫.不可有例外] was born in Hongdong, a little city in the Shanxi Province. Shanxi is in the northwestern part [or "Shanxi is northwest..."] of China and its provincial capital city is Taiyuan, which is in the north of our county. I had lived in there for four years since 2007. and it is a good time, I had a great time because i spent the whole four years were spent there in the college  at university.