Thunder and Lighting

Shanghai was extremely hot during July., which had For 24 days, over the temperature was over 38 degrees Celsius totally. It broke the record in recent 140 years.  which could go This meant going all the back to the Qing Dynasty. The hot weather caused several people dead deaths;  mostly the of them were elderlys. As an ordinary local resident, I didn't feel too uncomfortable very much because there has air conditioning is everywhere - such as in homes, offices, transportation complexes and shopping malls. It may be Perhaps the reason why cities are becoming hotter and hotter.

Today is the first day of August. It rained so heavily in the afternoon, complete with thunder and lighting. The whole sky was covered by the dark clouds, which turned plunged the day into night darkness suddenly. Strong winds tried to bend down all trees; beating down mercilessly on the flowers and grasses in the garden. Heavy raindrops beat smashed onto the roof tops and windows, made making quite a din loud noise. The rain was so heavy that many roads were drowned in a very short time.  [Since we are writing this paragraph in a poetic form, "drowned" is appropriate.  Otherwise, the word, "flooded" is better]

After the rain stopped, many people went outside to enjoy the cool and fresh air. It This may be a good beginning the start of a more joyful great summer.

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Thunder and Lighting

Shanghai was extremely hot during July, which had 24 days over 38 degree Celsius in total. It broke the record for the last 140 years, which could goes back to the Qing Dynasty. The hot weather caused the deaths of several people dead, most of them were elders. As an ordinary resident, I didn't feel uncomfortable very much because there is air conditioning everywhere, such as home, office, transportation and shopping malls. It may be the reason why cities are becoming hotter and hotter.
Today is the first day of August. It rained so heavily in the afternoon, with thunder and lighting. The whole sky was covered by a dark cloud, which turned day into night suddenly. Strong winds tried to bend down all trees, flowers and grasses in the garden. Heavy raindrops beat on the roofs and windows, making quite loud noise. The rain was so heavy that many roads were flooded in a short time.
After the rain stopped, many people went outside to enjoy the cool and fresh air. It may be a good beginning of a more joyful summer.

<Please help me to revise it, thanks a lot>

[Good work.  Living things drown, roads and buildings are flooded.]