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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


The issue of whether peoples’ incomes should be fully in their charge without paying income tax is of great concern of to some people. From my perspective, I am convinced that it is not only reasonable but also beneficial to individuals and society (ambiguous - what is?  the tax or having control?) .

Although some may claim that what they earn should belong to themselves is a basic human right, it is worth noting that the power and duties rights and obligations (??? difficult to understand - what power and what duties???) are not separable/inseparable an integrated part which cannot be separated. This is because people, as a citizens, could receive the obtain rights and benefits which governments ensure so that there is no point in objecting to the levy imposed by from government. Just as salaries apply to works, the counterpart of the civil rights is represented by the paying of taxes, to some extent.

Nevertheless, some still argue that the government already has some privileges, such as exploiting the nature resources, and ,for people, the salaries they get exclude the surplus value they create, which means by running business in specific industries, government could collects an abundant revenue wealth. It is no need unnecessary for them to ask people to pay more. However, national expenditures are tremendous, covering different areas such as infrastructure construction, public health, education, environmental protection and so forth. It is manifest that government can only guarantee stable revenue (re-order the sentence) by levying from every citizen. More importantly, the ultimate beneficiaries of these consistent expenditures spending’s ultimate beneficiaries could merely belong to are the people themselves.

In a nutshell, it is my belief that the government is an organization that is from the people, by the people, and for the people. Based on this, the money collected is to better serve the people. Therefore， by no means can people refuse to pay taxes.

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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of whether or not peoples' incomes [just say "income," not plural here] should be fully in their charge, without paying having no taxes, is of great concern of to some people. From my perspective, I am convinced that it is not only reasonable, but also beneficial to individuals and society that taxes be instituted [say something like this].

Although some may claim that what they earn should belong to themselves is a basic human right it is a basic human right to keep all that you earn [this is a better way to say it], it is worth noting that the power and duties are an integrated part which cannot be separated [I don't understand what you're saying here]. This is because the people, as a citizens, could receive enjoy [a more correct and common statement] the rights which government works to ensure, so that there is no point in objecting the levy from government it is only reasonable for taxes to be levied by the government [a better way to put it]. Just as Like job salaries to works, the counterpart of the right is presented by paying taxes, to some extent taxes are, to some extent, the compensation for labor (in this case by the government). 

Nevertheless, some still argue that the government already has some privileges, such as exploiting the land's natural resources, and, for some people, the salaries they get exclude the surplus value they create, which means that by running businesses in specific industries, government could collects collect an additional and abundant wealth. They argue that it is no need not necessary for them government to ask the people to pay more. However, national expenditures are tremendous, covering different areas, such as infrastructure construction, public health, education, environmental protection and so forth. It is manifested [manifest = adjective, manifested = past participle; past participle is the correct choice here] that only the the only stable revenue of government could can be solely guaranteed by levying taxes from every citizen. More importantly, these consistent spending’s ultimate beneficiaries could merely belong to the people themselves. [<<I don't understand what you're saying here.] 

In a nutshell, it is my belief that the government is an organization entity [a better term] that from ought to be [<<more correct] of the people, by the people, and for the people. Based on this idea, the money collected is to better serve the people. Therefore, by no means can people refuse to pay taxes. 

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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


The issue of whether peoples’ incomes should be fully in their charge without paying tax is of great concern of some people. From my perspective, I am convinced that it is not only reasonable, but also beneficial to individuals and society.

Although some may claim that what they earn should belong to themselves as a basic human right, it is worth noting that the power and duties are in an integrated relationship which cannot be separated. This is because people, as citizens, can receive the rights which government ensures so that there is no point in objecting to the levy from government. Just as salaries are to work, the counterpart of that right is represented by paying taxes, to some extent.

Nevertheless, some still argue that the government already has some privileges, such as exploiting the nature resources, and for people, the salaries they get exclude the surplus value they create, which means by running business in specific industries, government could collect an abundant wealth. There is no need for them to ask people to pay more. However, national expenditures are tremendous, covering different areas such as infrastructure construction, public health, education, environmental protection and so forth. It is manifest that only the stable revenue of government can solely guarantee these things, by levying from every citizen. More importantly, this consistent spending's ultimate beneficiaries could merely belong to are actually the people themselves.

In a nutshell, it is my belief that the government is an organization that is from the people, by the people, and for the people. Based on this, the money collected is to better serve the people. Therefore， by no means can people refuse to pay taxes.

[You make your point well.]