Writing an email.

Hi Jessie, can you help me to find a flat?
I don't like to live in the suburbs, because you spend a lot of time on the bus. So, it is better if I live in the center, because I'll be near of my job.
I don't want to be in a family house. I don't like rules, and if I lived with a family, I would have to follow their habits. So, it's preferable if you can find a room in a shared house. If it's not too expensive, I will be able to afford it.
One more thing. I need internet in the house, because I have to send a lot of emails. If I didn't have internet, I would have to find a cybercafe. And, please, only responsible people. I don't want to find a party at home everyday!

Writing an email.

Hi Jessie,

Can you help me to find a flat? I don't like want to live in the suburbs, because you I don't want to spend a lot of time in the a bus. So, it would be is better if I could live in the center, because I'll be near of my job.
I don't want to be in a family house. I don't like rules and if I lived with a family I would have to follow their habits. So, it's would be better if you can could look out find a room in a shared house. If it's not very expensive I will be able to pay for it.
One more thing. I need internet in the house, because I have to sent a lot of emails. If I didn't don't have internet I will have to find a cybercafe. And also, please, only responsible people. I don't want to have find a party at home everyday!

Good luck, hope you find a flat! Make sure to end your email with your name and contact details.