Please correct my composition: Some Risks that I Have Taken

I remember_a risk I had to take. I was really afraid of crossing a drawbridge, but if I hadn't gone through it, I wouldn't have enjoyed the beautiful scenery and a great trip. It was really a big decision. I didn't know whether I could let the whole trip be perfect or not.
　　When I was about 15, my parents took us to Ku-Kuan on a family trip. It was an extremely good chance for my family to relax and also to improve our relationships. We seldom hung out all together to other cities, so it was an extraordinary experience.
　　After visiting some great tourist spots there, the sky started to get darker and darker, so we decided to go to the hotel that we had booked. While heading for the hotel we were going to stay, I found that we had to cross a drawbridge to get to it. We also had to visit other spots at the other side of the bridge the next day. The moment I saw the drawbridge, I was tempted ask my parents to go back home that very night. Considering the whole trip, I plucked up my courage and stepped on the drawbridge, grabbing my dad's arm, trembling. They all knew that crossing the drawbridge was a big challenge for me, so they tried to encourage me, to convince me it was really no big deal. I was really afraid of its height. I didn't think that drawbridge was a safe thing for us to walk through because we might fall, and there were also a lot of people shaking it or jumping on it on purpose. I finally got through it and, in the end I had a nice trip with my dear family.
　　Thinking back, I was pretty glad that I didn't ask my parents to go back home then, or we might have wasted the money we had paid for the hotel. We would also had missed those great hot springs.

Considering the whole trip, I am afraid of such bridges.  I plucked up my courage and stepped on the draw swing bridge trembling while grabbing my daddy's arm, trembling. They all knew that crossing the drawbridge it was a big challenge great ordeal for me. so They tried to encourage me, and also said told me that it there was really nothing to be afraid of. I was really afraid of the its height of it, and I didn't thing and that drawbridge there was a nothing safe thing for us to walk through at all because we might may fall. and there were also a lot of people To make matters worse, there were many who were purposely shaking it or jumping on it on purpose. [Now I understand that it is not the kind I thought it was.  The one you are talking about is the suspension bridge make of wood or rope!  

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I finally got gathered my courage and went through it. and Needless to say, I had a very nice trip with my dear family. 

Thinking back, I was pretty glad that I didn't ask my parents to go back insist to return home at that time. or we might waste All the money that we paid for the hotel would be wasted, and also miss those great times at the hot springs would not have been enjoyed.  Wonderful memories would never have been made due to the foolishness of one little girl. A foolish little girl no longer.

Good story!

Please correct my composition: Some Risks that I Have Taken Took

I remember there is was a risk I took have taken. I was really afraid of crossing the drawbridge, but if I didn't go through it, I wouldn't not have enjoyed the beautiful scenery and how the great the  trip was. It was really a big decision that as I did not know whether I could let how the whole enitre trip would turn out. be perfect or not.

When I was about fifteen 15, my parents brought took us to Ku-Kuan, and it was  as a family trip. It was an extremely good chance for my family great idea to relax and also to improve our relationships to do some bonding. We seldom hang out all together,  to other cities, so it was an extraordinary experience for all of us.

After visiting some great tourist spots there, the sky got grew darker and darker. so We decided to go to head back to the hotel that we had booked. While heading for the hotel we are going to stay, I found that we had to cross the a drawbridge via this new route [You mean you haven't checked into the hotel first before touring? This is very out of the norm.  So I rewrote to reflect the normal thinking.  If this was not the case, you need to explain it before otherwise you will confuse your reader].  to get to it, and also, we had to visit other spots at the other side of the bridge the next day. [This is a confusing sentence to add into your essay. Write it in Chinese and let me see how this should be expressed better] At The moment I saw the drawbridge [A drawbridge is one you see in medievel castles where the entire bridge is pulled back into a vertical position to defend the castle.  The modern ones that can move to let ships/boats pass through are call "turning or swing bridges"], I almost wanted to ask plead with my parents to go back return home that night.