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An increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games Mane people hold the belief that violent images on television and in computer and video games has caused an increase in crime. I am the one who strongly agree with that opinion because of the following reason. Firstly, images on television have a big impact to human's brain. People has a tendency to imitate what goes on television. There are many popular TV programs which contain violent movies. That means when people feel familiar with crime, they don't pay enough attention on how to prevent crime. Secondly, computer and video games lead the people to a virtual world that every actions can be possible. It's a dangerous situation when the people try to be some characters in the game, and they form the game scenario by killing others. Moreover, living too much with virtual world in games, people lose human interaction. They don't care too much about social standard. It seems to be that they easily break the rule and get involved in crime. From my point of view, we can prevent people from getting involved in crime by reducing violent images appear in public media. We should categorize television program and computer and video games in order to strictly provide those things to people. In addition to managing the cause, we should improve security action such as organizing crime prevention education for local people, or reporting suspicious people in local area. Finally, although there are many reasons can cause the crime, we should reduce violent images as much as possible. We should lead the people to goodness so that the people can be accustomed to the favor. The less people see the crime, the less people are involved in crime.

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An increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games.

Many people hold the belief that violent images on television and in computer and video games has caused an increase in crime. I strongly agree with that opinion because of the following reason.

Firstly, images on television have a big impact on the human brain. People have a tendency to imitate what goes on television. There are many popular TV programs which contain violent movies. That means when people feel familiar with crime, they don't pay enough attention on how to prevent crime.

Secondly, computer and video games lead people to a virtual world where all actions are possible. It's a dangerous situation when people try to be like some characters in the game, and they form the game scenario by killing others. Moreover, living too much with virtual world in games, people lose human interaction. They don't care too much about social standard. It seems to be that they easily break the rule and get involved in crime.

From my point of view, we can prevent people from getting involved in crime by reducing violent images appear in public media. We should categorize television programs and computer and video games in order to strictly provide those things to people. In addition to managing the cause, we should improve security action such as organizing crime prevention education for local people, or reporting suspicious people in local area.

Finally, although there are many reasons can cause the crime, we should reduce violent images as much as possible. We should lead the people to goodness so that the people can be accustomed to the favor. The less people see the crime, the less people are involved in crime.

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