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Its been making her crazy

Its been driving her crazy, so she asked Gabe how you could find out if someone died or not. He took her to this big building near the capitol. He drove her all the way there, and he just sat in the drivers seat looking straight ahead at the road not asking me any questions. He took her to the room in the basement where they keep records of everything that happens in this country. He got her the death records from the past few weeks, and then he just sat beside her and let her do her thing. She held her breath and prayed really hard while looking at that list. God must have been listening because she never saw her name. But she did see a Jane Doe - Gabe says thats what they put down when they dont know who the woman is. That Jane Doe was 35, and she was found strangled down by the river that runs through downtown .

hi there just a few tips. don't put a space between the word that the punctuation is attached to and the punctuation

i.e you were not there , I was

Correction: you were not there, I was

Since this is a suspense story you don't need to put extra wording where there doesn't need to be to make it more gripping

hope that helps