Search from various English teachers...
Indonesia flagfiifreya
Went to military museum I went to military museum with my friends. We went there because we heave to do some howework from our lecturer. We were there to observe what were the heroes do to my country. To see what they did to make my country free from colonizer. There were weapony, painting, cloth that used by heroes, etc. The guide told us the story, we took notes and listen carefully. It's really good to know the history of your contry. Do you have this kind of museum in your country? We made a miniatur dorama about DI/TII rebellion and presenting it in the class. The lecturer gave us perfect score! I'm so happy!!

Corrections · 4

1

red for spelling mistakes
green for grammar
pink for additions
blue for other word suggestions

 

My visit to the Military museum

I went to the Military museum with my friends. We went there because we had to do some howework for our lecturer. We were there to observe what our national heroes did for our country. To see what they did to free my country from the colonisers.

There was weaponry, paintings, clothing worn by them, etc. The guide told us the story, we took notes and listened carefully. It's really good to know the history of your country. Do you have this kind of museum in your country?

We made a miniature drama about DI/TII rebellion and presenting it in the class. The lecturer gave us perfect score! I'm so happy!!

 

hope it helps 

0
Long live free Indonesia!
0
Thank you for your correction Mr. Alex! ^^
0
Hi.. I am a little tired to make too many corrections... but here's a few: Watch the past tense verbs - as you are telling this story, all of it happened in the past. For example: We went there because we had to do some... ....took notes and listened carefully. ......to observe what were the heroes of... (they are still the heroes now, correct?) - so you can just say to observe the heroes of our country It seems you use the word 'lecturer' instead of teacher. That's OK, but if this is the same person who gives you your lessons, then teacher is probably more appropriate. If this is a special speaker, or special teacher - then lecturer is fine. Some of the spelling is a bit off: miniature, drama One other thought- for acronyms like DI/TII. The very first time you use them, you should spell them out because your reader may know them. I do not know what the DI/TII rebellion is. Over all....pretty good. I have never been to Indonesia, I think would a lovely place to visit. :-) Alex

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today