The town of my dreams

The town of my dreams is Chicago. I don't know why it attracts me so much, maybe because I love high buildings. There is the Willis Tower and Skydeck Chicago, I want to see them SO MUCH! Also, I want to visit Navy Pier, it is the most the place of inrest for the most tourists and to see Buckingham fountain. I hope that my dream comes true soon!

The city of my dreams

The city of my dreams* is Chicago. I don't know why I love it so much, maybe it is because I love high buildings. Willis Tower and Skydeck Chicago are there and I want to see them SO MUCH! I also want to visit Navy Pier, which is a very popular tourist spot (?) and see Buckingham fountain. I hope my dreams come true soon!

*I think 'The city of my dreams' better refers to an imaginary city with certain qualities than a specific city that really exists that you just happen to like very much.

The town of my dreams

The town of my dreams is Chicago. I don't know, why it attracts me so much, may be maybe, because I love high buildings. There is the There are situated Willis Tower and Skydeck Chicago, and I want to see them SO MUCH! Also, I want to visit Navy Pier, it is the most the place of inrest for the most tourists and to see Buckingham fountain. I hope, that my dream comes true soon!

You have some good corrections already.  So here's a different style of writing.

The My Dream Town of my dream

The town of my dreams is Chicago. I don't know, why it attracts me so much. may be, Perhaps it is because I my love for tall high buildings. There are situated Willis Tower! and The Skydeck Chicago! and I want to see them ALLSO MUCH! Also, I want to visit the Navy Pier, is the most the place of rest visited place for tourists. and I want to see the Buckingham fountain. I hope, that My dream to comes true soon... This is what I hope!