Hello Juanito! You write really well, and it was acutally fun to read your post! The biggest mistake that you made was that many of your sentences were just way too long. You sould try to have shorter sentences with only one idea.

Today I feel like writting about freezing weather. In some parts of the world it is very cold at this time; people can suffer really extreme weather conditions and they may deal with this bad conditions in their daily lifes. (Sentence was too long) so it's important to keep warm because people are likely to get frostbite and hypothermia, both conditions can mean death and in some extreme cases when people get frostbite the doctors have to remove the frostbitten areas like fingers in order to avoid a bad gangrene infection.


Some suggestions/advice can be: Try to wear a  scarf, hat, and gloves.  Most of the time people think that if they dress heavy clothes they will keep warm, but I dont agree with this. I guess its better to dress a differents layers of light clothes in order to keep warming. Also try to stay dry to avoid geting sick. and Another mistake that people make is to drink alcohol to stay warm; this its not going to help you because alcohol just makes you feel warm for a little but the more you drink alcohol the more your body lose the ability to hold heat.


Bye guys, thanks so much for reviewing my writting :)

Great job, and keep up the goood work! :)

hello guys , I will be writing about random topics in order to practice my writing.

Hello guys!

Today I feel like writting about freezing cold weather. In some parts of the world it is very cold at this time. People can suffer really extreme weather conditions and they deal with this these bad conditions in their daily lifes day to day lives, so it's important to keep warm because people is are likely to get frostbite and hypothermia. Both of these conditions can mean death and in some extreme cases when people get frostbite the doctors have to remove the frostbitten areas (like fingers) in order to avoid prevent a worst worse gangrene infection.


Some recommendations can be are: Try to dress wear a scarf, hat, and gloves. Most of the time people think that if they dress wear heavy clothes they will keep warm. I don't agree with this. I guess it's better to dress a differents wear in light layers of light clothes in order to keep warming. Also try to stay dry to avoid getting sick. Another mistake that people do make its is to drinking alcohol to stay warm. This its is not going to help you because alcohol just makes you feel warm for a little while but the more you drink alcohol it the more your body loses the ability to hold retain heat. ["hold" is okay, but "retain" is even better here]

Nice job!


Bye guys, thanks so much for reviewing my writting :)

Hi! I'm new here and this is my first attempt at correcting anyone's work. You do write pretty well, but I agree with Ninjafoxx. Try to keep it to one idea per sentence. :) And just a little grammar tip... We usually use “make” when a new product is created and we usually use "do" when a task is done. 

I hope this helps! :) 

Hello guys , I will be writing about random topics in order to practice my writing.

Hello guys!

Today, I feel like writting about the freezing weather. In some parts of the world, it is very cold at this time. People can suffer really extreme weather conditions and they deal with these bad conditions in their daily lives so it's important to keep warm because people are likely to get frostbite and hypothermia. Both conditions can mean death and in some extreme cases, when people get frostbite, the doctors have to remove the frostbitten areas, like the fingers, in order to avoid a worst gangrene infection.


Some recommendations can be: Try to wear a scarf, hat, gloves. Most of the time, people think that if they dress in heavy clothes, they will keep warm. I don't agree with this. I guess/think it's better to dress a differents wear layers of light clothes in order to keep warming warm. Also, try to stay dry to avoid get getting sick. and Another mistake tha people do make its to drink  is drinking alcohol to stay warm. and This its is not going to help you because alcohol just makes you feel warm for a little while, but the more you drink alcohol the more your body loses the ability to hold heat.


Bye guys. Thanks so much for reviewing my writting writing. :)

hello guys , I will be writing about random topics in order to practice my writing.

Hello guys!

Today I feel like writting about Freezing Weather. In some parts of the world is very cold at this time, people can suffer really extreme weather conditions and they deal with this bad conditions in their daily lifes so it's important to keep warm because people is likely to get frostbite and hypothermia , both conditions can mean death and in some extreme cases when people get frostbite the doctors have to remove the frostbitten areas like fingers in order to avoid a worst gangrene infection.


some recomendations can be: Try to dress scarf,hat, gloves and most of the time people think that if they dress heavy clothes they will keep warm, I dont agree with this I guess its better to dress a differents layers of light clothes in order to keep warming. Also try to stay dry to avoid get sick and another mistake tha people do its to drink alcohol to stay warm and this its not going to help you because alcohol just make you feel warm for a little but the more you drink alcohol the more your body lose the ability to hold heat. 
 
Bye guys, thanks so much for reviewing my writting :)

This is very interesting!