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Have you heard this?! :))) Just not long ago some scientists have found out: a good planet for living does exist. This is Gliese581g: the enigmatic planet with a boring name. Why is it good for living? It gets as much heat as Earth, and it may have liquid aqua. Gliese average temperature is about +20C. Though, it has triple gravity, so the livers of this planet must be stumpy. If I’d been living there (on this planet), I would stick to the surface and not be able to walk! :) And a year of this planet lasts about 37 Earth days. So what do you think: does there another life exist!? :)

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Have You Heard This? 

Not long ago some scientists have found out that a good planet  that can support life does exist. This is Gliese581g: the enigmatic planet with a boring name. How can it support life? It gets as much heat as Earth, and it may have water on it. Glieses' average temperature is about +20C. It has triple our gravity, so the rivers on this planet must be slow. (??)  If I was living on Gliese I would stick to the surface and not be able to walk!   And a year on this planet lasts about 37 Earth days. So what do you think?  Could alien life exist on Gliese?

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Have you heard this?! :)))

Just not long ago some scientists have found out: a good planet good for living on does exist {{nice use of the emphatic form 'does exist' - correct, and necessary}}. This is Gliese581g: the enigmatic planet with a boring name. Why is it good for living? It gets as much heat as Earth, and it may have liquid aqua water. Gliese average temperature is about +20C. Though However, it has triple-strength gravity {{Even better is "its gravity is three times stronger than Earth's}}, so the livers {{inhabitants | people | beings}} of this planet must be stumpy. If I’d been living there {{"if i lived there is" is better... present simple, subjunctive... the present simple is usually very general and flexible regarding time, rather than referring to the present moment only, therefore it works well here}}  (on this planet), I would stick to the surface and not be able to walk! :) And a year of on this planet lasts about 37 Earth days. So what do you think: does there another life exist!? :) {{rather, "does another form of life exist there" or "is there another form of life there" or "does there exist another form of life [in general]", which is mildly archic, or "does there exist another form of life there [on that particular planet]", again mildly archaic. In general, "does there exist ____" is mildly but noticably archaic/poetic and "does ____ exist [on/in ___]" is the present-day idiom. As you probably know, the meaning is the same either way, because 'there' is a 'dummy subject' when used this way - exactly as "it's" is a dummy subject in "It's raining today in France."}}

"Found out that a planet good for living on does exist" is better than "found out: a planet good for living on does exist". But, the latter is grammatically correct. It's merely a matter of good, smooth style, not a matter of grammar. That's why I'm noting it at the bottom, rather than within the text.

"a good planet for living on does exist. It's Gliese" is better than "a good planet for living on does exist. This is Giese"

I too would be stuck to the ground on Gliese, probably no less hopelessly than yourself! - I'm not very robustly built. We will have to send some Olympic weight-lifters with big muscles and short limbs.

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