Rich Merchant and His Four Wives... ... Capitalize all significant words in a title.

Once upon a time. There was a rich merchant who had four wives. He loved the 4th fourth one wife the most, and adorninged her with rich robes and treating ed her to delicacies. He took great care of her and gave her nothing but the best.

He also loved the 3rd third wife very much. He's very proud of her and always wanted to show off her to his friends. However, the merchant is always in great fear that she might run away with some other men.

He too, loved his 2nd second wife. She is a very considerate person, always patient and in fact is the merchant's confidante. Whenever the merchant faced some problems, he always turned to his 2nd wife and she would always help him out and tide him through difficult times.

Now, the merchant's 1st first wife is a very loyal partner and has made great contributions in maintaining his wealth and business; as well as taking care of the household. However, the merchant did not love the first wife her and although she loved him deeply, he hardly took notice of her.

One day, the merchant fell ill. Before long, he knew that he was going to die soon. He thought of his luxurious life and told himself, "Now I have 4 four wives with me. But when I die, I'll shall be alone. How lonely I'll be!" Thus, he asked the his fourth 4th wife, "I loved you most, endowed you with the finest clothing and showered the greatest care over you. Now that I'm dying, will you follow me and keep me company?"

"No way!" she replied the 4th wife and she walked away without another word.

The answer stabbed cut like a sharp knife right into the merchant's heart.

The sad merchant then asked the his third 3rd wife, "I have loved you so much for all my life. Now that I'm dying, will you follow me and keep me company?"

"No!" replied she the 3rd wife. "Life is so good over here! I'm going to remarry when you die!" The merchant's heart sank and turned cold.

He then asked the second 2nd wife, "I always turned to you for help and you've always helped me out. Now I need your help again. When I die, will you follow me and keep me company?" "I'm sorry. I can't help you out this time!" came the reply. replied the 2nd wife. "At the very most, I can only send you to your grave." The answer came like a bolt of thunder and the merchant was devastated.

Then Finally, a voice came softly, called out: "I'll shall leave with you. I'll follow you no matter where you go." The merchant looked up and there she was; before him was his first wife. She was so wraith-like that skinny, almost like as if she was suffering suffered from malnutrition.

Greatly aggrieved, the merchant lamented said, "I should have taken much better care of you while I could have!"

Your English is very very good!  Except for the mechanics, here and there, you are doing well.  You have a good grasp of the more complicated sentence structures and know how to use them effectively.

I am showing you some other words in spicing up the story.  Some changes are for more a more natural way to express.  Repeating the same words too much will make any piece of writing a bore.  Remember that when you tell a story, it must have interest, excitement, passion etc to inflame your readers.  Keep on writing and you will become great.