مریض شدم!

امروز من مریض شدم. سردرد و تب دارم. کی وقتی مریض میشویم نمیتونم هیچ چیزکاری کنم. میخم می خام بخوام یا بنوشم اما نمیتونم. نا امید شدم!

hi Richard

you wrote well. take notice that we can use "when" as a relative pronoun or for questioning but it is not the same in persian.

in persian, we use "کی" for asking question about a time, but we use "وقتی " as a relative pronoun.

وقتی من مریض شدم او به من کمک کرد

when i fell ill, he helped me.

you should memorize that we use " کردن" for "کار" but"چیز " collocate with "انجام دادن"

so "نمی توانم کاری کنم "or "نمی توانم چیزی را انجام دهم"

i hope you get better soon.

مریض شدم!

امروز من مریض شدم. سردرد و تب دارم.هروقت یا وقتی  کی مریض میشوم نمیتوانم هیچ کاری چیز کنم( یا هیچ چیزی انجام دهم) .

می خواهم بخوابم  یا بنوشم اما نمیتوانم. نا امید شدم!

               اگر بخواهی عامیانه بنویسی باید به جای "میخواهم بنویسی میخام و نمیتونم هم به صورت عامیانه درست است.

مریض شدم!

امروز من مریض شدم. سردرد و تب دارم. کی وقتی مریض می‌شوم (Formal)/می‌شم(Informal) میشویم نمیتونم هیچ کاری بکنم. چیز کنم. میخم می‌خوام بخوابم بخوام 

کی = what time?l    -   وقتی= when, e.g: I eat when I'm hungry      

می‌شویم= we become...l    -    می‌شوم= I become...l              

کلمه‌های غلط - کلمات تصحیح شده و درست - 

Good day!

Your 2 first sentences and the last one are neat and 100% correct. Congrats! And the other two need a little more attention. I assume in the 3rd sentence, you wanted to say: "When I feel sick, I can't do anything.", and you said it like this: "کی مریض میشویم نمیتونم هیچ چیز کنم." Now Look at the points below:

1- You simply substituted "when" with "کی" and this is wrong! :D "کی" is a question word and means "What time?", but you didn't want to ask a question by that sentence, did you?! hahaha... .To correct it, put "وقتی (=when)" instead of "کی".

2- I suppose you know the difference between "می شویم" and "می شوم", do you?! The first one is used for the plural 1st person (=we) and the second one is used for the singular 1st person (=I). PLEASE pay attention to every verb ending and use them according to the subject of the sentence!! And put an empty space between "می" and "شویم" when you write it. This dictation point has to be noticed while writing every verb which is started with "می". In our schools, it's a BIG mistake in the dictation exams if you connect "می" to the next part of the verb!!

3- Do you know that "نمی تونم [/ne'mi:'tu:'nᴂm/]" is the informal for "نمی توانم[/ne'mi:'tᴂ'va:'nᴂm/]"?? If you use the informal words when you still haven't mastered grammatical rules, your Farsi language base will be weak, and you'll soon get tired of learning it. Most of the Farsi verbs are changed in a few of their letters while you're gonna talk fast or speak informally. Don't worry about that, it's not a big deal to learn. You can easily learn it AFTER grammar rules. For example in English, they simply say "going to" and "gonna", or "have got to" as "gotta" when they talk informally. It's all the same and similar here in Farsi. But a beginner English learner never says "gotta" in his speeches or compositions. Similarly in Farsi, always try to use formal form of the verbs.

4- Note that "چیز" simply means "thing" and "هیچ" means "nothing", a simple combination would give you "هیچ چیز" for saying "nothing".That's correct. But what if I wanna say "anything"?? The translation would give you "هر[hᴂr]" for "any" and "چیز" for "thing". The resule is: "هر چیز". It's true and correct, BUT the simple way isn't always the best way!! and that's only one side of the coin!! The fact of matter is that the meaning of "anything" depends on the sentence. So you can't simply translate this: "I can't do anything" as "من نمی توانم هرچیز کنم". That literal translation seems to be true in face, but it's a funny wrong sentence!! "anything" in this context has to be translated as "هیچ" which was the translation of "nothing". So until now, our translation would be: "من نمی توانم هیچ کنم". This sentence still lacks sth. The key is hidden in the translation of "do" which was replaced by "کنم". This isn't 100% right. The full translation of "do" is: "کاری را انجام دادن(=[literally]to do a work)". "انجام دادن" and "کردن" have the same meaning (do), and are two infitives. They produce verbs according to the subject and tense i.e. "انجام دادم، انجام دادی،...ه" or "کردم، کردی،...ه". Briefly, our translation would be: "من نمی توانم هیچ کاری کنم" OR "من نمی توانم هیچ کاری انجام دهم". I know you're asking: Where did that "را" go?! Why did "انجام دادن" and "کردن" change to "انجام دهم" or "کنم"?!?! Well, your answer needs a bunch of lessons around transitive and intransitive Farsi verbs AND different Farsi tenses (=verb of different times such as past, present,...).