Where Is the Real Paradise

Where Is the Real Paradise

New Zealand, a small beautiful and developed country, with agriculture as well as tourism are its two biggest supporting industries, has always ranked top 5 in “world’s most suitable places to live” chart in recent years. Winning the reputation of ”the last piece of pure paradise in the world”, NZ becomes a new considerable option for immigration among Chinese people. But now, just like other countries, NZ has experienced a strong economic depression, which took place in USA first and then spread out to the whole world, which affected NZ deeply. The low economic growth rate and high unemployment rate forced the government to tighten the immigration policy, which was bad news for those who wanted to emigrate to NZ. One of my friends was very depressed when she heard the news. In her opinion China sucks now and it is even worse than ever. Things like polluted air, untidy and unsafe food, high living cost, unfair education cover, and the worst, the unacceptable housing fees, she can’t stand any longer and she is keen to move to another country.

At the same time, China, which is intolerable in her opinion, is a promising country for someone who comes from the other side of the world. Some young adults from Spain expressed their hope of migrant to China while Spain had a nation-wide strike this year, considering the booming economy in China. As a matter of fact, becoming a millionaire overnight is quite normal sometimes. However, every coin has two sides. People from outside the country just can’t see and feel the dark side in spite of the great economic achievement. Meanwhile, if my friend emigrates to NZ successfully, can she handle the problems like language and the culture barrier, life-making, isolation and so on? She might also miss China frequently.

Is it true that “life is elsewhere” just like the Kundera’s book title? I believe so. Sometimes people just don’t want to face up to the problems around, so they pretend to think that they could be better in another place, choosing to be blind. Human beings are the same species, the problems caused by human in one place would not disappear in another place, it just varies according to the way it has been made. Though every human being in this world has the right to move to a better living place, I just want to say that life may not that bad as you think, try to discover the bright side patiently(including me)- maybe the real paradise is just where we are.

Hi Vicky,

Your English is very good! I have corrected your mistakes. I am learning two languages and I know I would not be able to write like this. Well done!

Jeevan

Where Is the Real Paradise

Where Is the Real Paradise

New Zealand, a small beautiful and developed country, which agriculture as well as tourism are its two biggest supporting industries, has always ranked in the top 5 in chart of “world’s most suitable places to live” chart in recent years. Winning the reputation as ”the last piece of pure paradise in the world”, NZ becomes a new considerable option for immigration among Chinese people. But now, just like other countries, NZ has experienced a strong economic depression which took place in USA first and then spread out to the whole world which affected NZ deeply. The low economic growth rate and high unemployment rate forced the government to tighten the immigration policy, which was a bad news for those who want to immigrant to NZ. ("Low econmoic growth rather and high unemployment" for NZ or the rest of the world?  There isn't enough information to make this statement understandable.) One of my friends was very depressed the moment when she heard the news. Because in her opinion, China sucks now, is even worse than ever. Things like polluted air, untidy and unsafe food, high living cost, unfair education cover, and the worst, the unacceptable house fee, all of these, she can’t stand any longer, is keen to move to another country. (When she head what news?  What does your friend have to do with NZ being Paradise?  China has unity and unsafe food....or NZ?  Try to stay with one topic.)

At the same time, the intolerable China, in her opinion, is a promising country for someone who comes from the other side of the world. Some young adult from Spain expressed their hope of migranting to China while Spain broke out a national-wide strike this year, considering the booming economy in China. As a matter of fact, a millionaire overnight is quite normal sometimes. However, every coin has two sides, people from outside the country just can’t see and feel the dark side in spite of the great economy achievement. Meanwhile, if my friend immigrants to NZ successfully, can she handle the following problem like language and culture barrier, living-making, isolation and so on? Or she would miss China frequently? What does China have to do with NZ being paradise? 

Is it true that “life is elsewhere” just like the Kundera’s book title? I believe so. Sometimes people just don’t want to face up the problems around them; they pretend to think that they could be better in another place, or chose to be blind. Human beings are the same speci, the problems caused by humans in one place would not disappear in another place, it just varies the way it has been made. Though every human being in this world has the right to move to a better living place, I just want to say that life may not that bad as you think, try to discover the bright side patiently(including me), maybe the real paradise is just where we are.

Your writing had only a few mistakes.  However, your subject did not make any sense.  You jumped around so much, it confusses the reader.  I did, however, like the ending.  Keep up the good work.