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Tell you something about me and search for help It’s been a very long time since my last diary. I am sorry for the friends ,who always pay attention to me. I’ve been busy these days. I am senior now, so I have to think about what my career will be, and then try my best to find a good job in that area. There is another problem I want to search help from you all, my dear friends. One of my close friends, Yan, she has been admitted to one of the most famous universities in China for her postgraduate study ,and she has to prepare for an impressive interview .she has to make an introduction of herself in English. But her English is not good enough , she wants to make a good impression to professors, and I really want to do her a favor. I will prepare the interview essay as soon as possible, maybe tomorrow or the day after tomorrow or even a little longer, because I want to make it perfect . Then I will make it public in my diary book. I sincerely hope that there will be some friends help to correct it ,edit it ,and give their opinions on it ,finally make it impressive. because time is limited ,I am afraid that some friends will miss it or help me too late, I sincerely hope that anyone who really wants to do me a favor, please do write down your email address ,and I will send my essay to you for correcting . I look forward to hear from you. That’s all. best wishes!

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I am Telling you something about me and searching for help


It’s been a very long time since my last diary entry. I am sorry for to the friends ,who always pay attention to me. I’ve been busy these days. I am a senior now, so I have to think about what my career will be, and then try my best to find a good job in that area.
There is I seek your help on another problem I want to search help from you all, my dear friends. One of my close friends, Yan, she has been admitted to one of the most famous universities in China for her postgraduate study ,and she has to prepare for an impressive interview .she has to make an introduction of herself in English. But her English is not good enough , . sShe wants to make a good impression to the professors, and I really want to do her a favor.
I will prepare the interview essay as soon as possible, maybe tomorrow or the day after tomorrow or even a little longer, because I want to make it perfect . Then I will make it public in my diary book. I sincerely hope that there will be some friends help to to helpcorrect it ,edit it ,and give their opinions on it ,and finally, make it impressive. bBecause time is limited ,I am afraid that some friends will miss it or help me too late,. I sincerely hope that anyone who really wants to do me a favor, please do write down your email address ,and I will send my essay to you for correcting . I look forward to hearing from you.
That’s all. best wishes!

Some issues for your attention on this entry:
Avoid placing a comma infront of "and."
Look at your punctuation more carefully.
Start new sentences more often, rather than using commas.

You have a few awkward sentences but that can be talked about later.
Your English is excellent. I'm happy to help. ^.^
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