Thomas' correction is superb and I cannot do any better.  However, what you wrote is too good not to give it a polish :)

The Country of Beautiful Women

When somebody from a country diferent from mine asks to me, “Where are you from?” and I answer “from Venezuela” quickly that person The inquirer quickly commented, tells me “Oh, the country of beautiful women”. [He's giving you a compliment and not because of your reasons stated later.  However, this is a very good opening line to your essay]

Venezuela is known on the world for two mains major reasons: crude oil and beautiful women. This last affirmation Perhaps this is due to its many Venezuelan beauties participating participations in suchseveral beauty pageants. that’s This is a fact  reality. However, peculiar in particular, I don’t think that a beauty pageant represents the true beauty of women from a in the country. This is because nowadays, almost all girls that participating in this contest, have been subjected participants had undergone to many some sort of plastic surgery to ehance their nose, their lips, their breasts or their butt.  surgeries, such as: breast implants, rhinoplasty, buttocks implant, liposuction, so on.

I wonder, Is this the true what is the definition of beauty?, perhaps the response depends on the thinking way of everyone, This is so subjective but I don't think that the beauty isn’t the definition is just a pretty face or a even a sculptured body.  , even, I could say that The majority of Venezuelan women do not boast of a don’t have (we don’t have) measurements 90-60-90 measurement, graced with perfect complexion or walking 1.8m tall on perfectly shaped legs!, neither measure 1.80 tall, so that, these contest just want to represent an utopía and not the reality. Beauty contests are just dreams of utopia for the lucky few.  It is not a reality of its general populace.

By means of entry, I don’t want to am not saying that Venezuelan women aren’t are not beautiful, but I am disagree with the criteria in these contests. beauty parameters imposed, I think that [Don't be wishy washy.  Assert yourself!]Women of my country, or any other woman in this world, have other virtues to show themselves off. to the world.

Well, Just as Dalí had said, said a day: “Have no fear of perfection, you’ll never reach it”


What is your definition of the world "beauty"?

[Inner beauty is standard and objective while physical beauty is subjective.  "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder"]

=)

P.S: The picture shows the Miss Venezuela who won winning [the title of  in the Miss Universe in 2009.

The Country of Beautiful Women

When somebody from a country different [2 f's] from mine asks to me “Where are you from?” and I answer “from Venezuela”,[comma] quickly that person tells me, “Oh, the country of beautiful women”.

Venezuela is known on in the world for two mains reasons: crude oil and beautiful women.[period] This last affirmation is due to its many participations in several beauty pageants.That's a reality. However, peculiar   I don’t think that a beauty pageant truly represents the beauty of women from a country. This is because nowaday almost all girls that participate in this contest have been subjected to  undergone [we often use undergone when talking about surgery .... been subjected to sounds like they were forced to do it against their will]]many plastic surgeries, such as: breast implants, rhinoplasty, buttocks implant, liposuction,and  so on.

I wonder, Is this the true definition of beauty? Perhaps the response depends on the thinking way way of thinking of everyone, but I think that the beauty isn’t just a pretty face or a sculpted body. even, I could say  I'm confident in saying that a majority of Venezuelan women don’t have (we don’t have) measurements 90-60-90, perfect complexion, perfect legs, neither  or  measure 1.80 tall. so that, It is clear that these contest just want to represent an utopía and not the reality.

By means of entry,  By no means do I want to say that I don’t want to say that Venezuelan women aren’t beautiful, but I am disagree with the beauty parameters imposed. I think that women of my country have other virtues to show to the world.

Well, as Dalí said a day:

“Have no fear of perfection, you’ll never reach it”


What is your definition of the world "beauty"?

=)

P.S: The picture shows the Miss Venezuela who won in the Miss Universe 2009.

This is just my own version of what you are trying to express. You did very well! Keep writing!

The Country of Beautiful Women

When somebody from a country different from mine asks to me “Where are you from?” and I answer “from Venezuela” quickly (or instantly) that person will tells me “Oh, the country of beautiful women”.

Venezuela is known on (or in)  the world for two mains reasons: crude oil and beautiful women. this( The)  last affirmation is due to its many participations in several beauty pageants. That’s a reality. However, It's peculiar, and I don’t think that a beauty pageant represents the beauty of women from a country, because nowadays almost all of the girls that are participating in this these  contests , have been subjected to many plastic surgeries, such as: breast implants, rhinoplasty, buttocks implant, liposuction, so on.

I wonder, Is if this is a the true definition of beauty?, Perhaps the response depends on the way of thinking way of everyone, but I think that the beauty isn’t just a pretty face or a sculpted body. even   I could ( or would) say that the majority of Venezuelan women don’t have (we don’t have) measurements 90-60-90, perfect complexion, perfect legs, neither (or nor)  measure 1.80 tall. so that, These contests just want to represent an  a utopía and not the reality.

By means of entry, I don’t want to say that Venezuelan women aren’t beautiful. but I am simply disagree with the beauty parameters imposed. I think that women of my country have other virtues to show to the world.

Well, as Dalí said a day:

“Have no fear of perfection, you’ll never reach it”


What is your definition of the word "beauty"?

=)

P.S: The picture shows the Miss Venezuela who won in the Miss Universe in 2009.

Hola Grecia.  Las correcciones de Jeff y Thomas son mejores. . Sólo quería ofrecerte algo sencillo para mantener tu entrada casi intacto.