For and against essay - Can you please check it :)

Hi everyone. This is my homework and I'm not sure if it's ok. It would be great if anybody would like to someone can check it and show me my the mistakes. The reason why [bad English] that it is so short is that it can't be longer than 250 words. The subject is: People spend too much money on animals and should spend it on people other human beings. Honestly, I didn't don't know what can I can write about this so I don't know and what I wrote if it makes any sense.

Since the following is a piece of homework, it must be written in a formal style.  Unlike the previous personal plea, I shall be correcting as such.  Hence you will notice the change where all your slangs, contractions etc are either removed or changed.  Also some of the points you have presented is weak.  Being the presumptious me and that you have asked, I had added some of mine to boost your piece.  Of course, you are most free to disregard them.

Is it true that people spend much more money on animals than on people other human things? If it is, even with the current financial crisis, it does not indicate otherwise. why does it look like this nowadays when the financial crisis has spread all the world?

A major argument is that animals cannot take care of themselves [Not true.  Animals can take care of themselves but their habits are ruined by humans and thus unable to survive]. Some of them were are in the danger of extinction but thanks to people consevation, protection and intervention by humans, their survival is not as precarious  they survived. Unfortunately, everything has its own price, and nothing is free. Moreover, it is fantastic incredulous that there are still people who preferring to buy their pelts for their fashion statement. ing some food for kennels instead of clothes or purses made by killing defenseless animals still exist.

However, besides animals the world has got much more needs to spend money on them. Because of wars and other happenings in the past many people are starving, kids do not have books, cannot read and write. Only few percent of world population are trying to help people from the Third World. Everywhere we can see the consequences of human selfishness. [The way your logic is presented is not strong and convincing.]

Humans have a responsibility to ensure the problems they created do not destroy any species impacted.  However these problems, such as war also cause starvation, mass migration of humans.  People are disloged from their homes, children have no permanent place to study let alone to have decent food and water for their daily needs.  We see selfishness of one human group imposed on another.

To sum up, it is hard to say why if animals are better treated better than people. The human race is always at some kind of war or other with each other.  Never is there a time when no war is fought.  To spend more on saving the destruction of animal species or to save the human species is a difficult question to answer.  Different people sees the situation differently. In my opinion, saving the animals is better.  The human race is the only species that wage constant warfare on each other, destroying everything in its path. was striving to self-destruction for so many times that this could be the reason. Of two evils, it is better to spend too much money on animals than not spending any of it and leave them starving and in dangers of today’s world.

For and against essay - please check it :)

Hi everyone. This is my homework and I'm not sure if it's ok. It would be great if anybody would like to check it and show me my mistakes. The reason why it is so short is that it can't be longer than 250 words. The subject is: People spend too much money on animals and should spend it on other human beings. Honestly, I didn't know what can I write about this so I don't know if it makes any sense.

Is it true that people spend much more money on animals than on other people?

human things? If it is, so, why does it look like this nowadays when the financial crisis has spread all over the world?

A major argument is that animals cannot take care of themselves. Some of them were in danger of extinction but thanks to people they survived. Unfortunately, everything has its own price, nothing is free. Moreover, it is fantastic that people who prefer buying some food for kennels instead of clothes or purses made by killing defenseless animals. still exist.

However, besides animals the world has got much more other needs to spend money on. them. Because of wars and other happenings in the past many people are starving, kids do not have books, and cannot read and write. Only a few small percentage of the world population are is trying to help people from the Third World countries. Everywhere we can see the consequences of human selfishness.

To sum up, it is hard to say why animals are treated better than people. The human race was striving has been close to self-destruction for so many times that this could be the reason. Of the two evils, it is better to spend too much money on animals than not spending any of it and leaving them starving and in danger. of today’s world.

:)