Finally, my third pie came out of the oven.  My, my... It was the best one I had ever made! Pear and cinnabon are is an amazing combination! My mom came home from work and exclaimed said, that our flat smeltls as like a bakery.))

She enjoyed her evening tea with a piece of the hot pie.

I took placed a one piece slice [I hate to use the same word in so close a vicinity] on the a plate and with a cup of tea, I took them to my room again and started began to answer to new letters mail from new clients, who want to work with me [Superfluous]. When I finished, Than I closed my mailbox and is now I'm writing this text my day's activities [To tie your story with the title]to for improving improve my English. When it will be finished, Upon finishing, Not wrong except for the tense, just using a different sentence structure to make the flow of the story more interesting] I will shall read a book about on illustration on in my cozy sofa. , and When my eyes will become tired, I will shall go to bed.


***Please, check my tenses and explain to me what tense the reason for it. I should better use and why. Thank you!

Like Jura had explained.  When writing a story, you should use the past tense.  However, writing everything in the past tense makes your writing dull and boring.  Just like in a movie, you need to have some flashbacks and make it as if it is happening in the present.  At least use continuous past tense to accomplish the effect.  For example, you can do it for the baking part to make the reader salivate and smell what's in their mind or their experience.  I am sure there are parallels in the finer points of illustration.

On good writing, varied your sentence structure.  Use some sugary words to powder your writing like you do with pies etc.  Sometimes you need to be terse and other times a bit more detailed to achieve the desired effect.  For example, I changed your title to be a bit long winded and your "place of work" into "workplace".  In this kind of writing, you can pepper it with slang here and there to give it an airy effect.  You don't want a staid and a heavy reading.

Overall, I really enjoyed your writing very much; very delightful and I can almost smell your pies as you are making me hungry now!  Excellent work.  You should write more often!  I am not trying to flatter you.  If you got Jura's correction... She does not correct entries often.  So your story must interest her very much :)

Check my Tenses Grammar please!) "One housewife's day"

Today I woke up early and felt very energetic. I took a shower and decided to cook a pie for a breakfast. I made a delicious pie with berries. Then I brought my plate with  the pie and a cup of tea to my room, where I always work.

While I was eating my pie, I checked my emails and started to work. I finished several illustrations for one client, and one more illustration for another. I felt  happy, because I have been working for these clients for two weeks, and today was the last day.

When I sent my last letter to client,  I saw that my pie was finished. I had eaten it at all! I forgot to keep one piece of pie for my mom, and I decided to make a second pie, with dates and raisins. While it was baking, I vacuumed the flat and made some sketches for my next illustration.

When pie was ready, I found that it was not as delicious as the first one. My mom was going to come home in two hours, so I decided to cook a third cake — with pears and cinnamon!

I put my pie into the oven and went to do some housework — to iron some clothes, that I had been washing the day before, to wash the dishes and to call  the Door Shop and hire an installer for my new flat.

Finally, my third pie was the best one I had ever made! Pear and cinnamon are an amazing combination! My mom came  back from work and said that our flat smelled like a bakery!

She enjoyed her evening tea with a piece of hot pie.

I put one piece on the plate, took a cup of tea to my room again and started to answer some new letters from new clients, who wanted to work with me. Then I shut down my computer and wrote about these events to improve my English. When I finished, I read a book about illustration on my cozy sofa, and when my eyes became tired, I went to bed.


***Please, check my tenses and explain to me what tense I should better use and why. Thank you!

As you are retelling these events write in the past tense

I just could not resist reading such a delightful story and so even it is a long piece, I decided to correct it.  Jura had beat me to it :)  So I shall correct it a different way so that you can see how marvellous the English language can be.

Please check my tenses and grammar.  Thanks. please!)

One A Day of a Housewife's day"

Today, I woke up early and felt myself very energetic [or you can say, "full of vigor/zip", "top of the world", "zippy"]. I took a showered and decided to cook make a pie for a breakfast. I made a tasty pie one with berries. Then I brought With the pie on a plate with pie and a cup of tea, I brought them to my room, where I always work. [or you can simply say, "... brought them to my workroom"]

While I had been was eating it my pie, I checked my email and started began to my work. I finished several illustrations for one client, and one more illustration for another. I felt myself happy, because I have had been working for these clients them for the past two weeks, and today was the my last day with them.

When I sent After sending my last letter email to my client, I saw, that I had finished the entire my pie was ended. I have eat it at ate all of it! I had forgotten to keep one leave a piece/slice of cake [a pie is not a cake :)] for my mom! and I decided to make a second one [or you can use "another"].he second cake, This one with dates and raisins. While it had been was baking, I vacuumed the flat and made some scketches sketched some for my next illustration.

When cake Once it was done, ready, I gave a taste test and to my dismay, found that it's was not as tasty as the first one. My Mom had to come will be home in two hours, and I decided to cook the go for a third one cake — this time with pear and cinnamon [Cinnabon, in the US, is a pastry made with lots of cinnamon and butter!  Yum, yum but very fattening :( ] cinnabon! I put my pie to the oven, and went to do some More housework — to ironing some clothes, that I had been washeding the day beforeyesterday [What you wrote is not wrong.  I like brevity.  I like to use a single word if it does not change the tone or meaning.], to washing the dishes and to calling  to the door shop and see if I can get hire an installer for my new flat.