Search from various English teachers...
South Korea flaglapianist
a Letter from my brother my family got a letter today. it was from my brother. he is on call of military duty since last august. in korea, all healthy korean guys undergo 20-month military service. he wrote 'it was ok.' he will switching his troops(awkward expression)* and there take driving job soon. he thought of himself and our family in the rest of working time. he thanked us only because we get his call and mail him regulary.he met a variety of people from everywhere korea. and thanked family for giving him proper education and financial support. I remember the day when my brother left to the military camp. dad drove the car to the camp ground where he was assigned. about a thousand of young guys were together with their family. a senior soldier with green uniform shouted."No money and anything needed. Clothes, shoes, watch, and everything with you now will be sent back to your house by postage." He appeared to be anxious. My brother seemed like a chicken, awaiting to be sold to unknown place and destiny to be butchered anxiously.He was really a chicken. He will be moved by truck with the guys he never saw and where he never been. What he did and have in mind don't matter at all. my beloved brother counts only as a tiny tiny particle of the whole system. I wish my brother would be in a better condition. and wish him to have considerate time to look back himself.

Corrections · 4

0
안녕하세요. 만나서 반갑습니다.
0

a Letter from my brother

Corrected
Wrong word\form of the word
This sounds better

my family got a letter today. it was from my brother. he is on military duty since last august. in korea, all healthy korean guys undergo 20-month military service.
he wrote 'it was ok.' he will be switching his troops (awkward expression)* and there take  taking a driving job soon. he thought of himself and our family, during the rest of working time. he thanked us only because we got his call and send him mail regulary. he met a variety of people from all over korea. and thanked his\their family for giving him proper education and financial support.
I remember the day when my brother left for the military camp. dad drove the car to the camp ground where he was assigned. about a thousand of young guys were together with their family. a senior soldier with a green uniform shouted."No money or anything needed. Clothes, shoes, watch, and everything with you now will be sent back to your house by postage."
He appeared to be anxious. My brother seemed like a chicken, waiting to be sold to unknown place and destined to be butchered anxiously. He was really a chicken. He will be moved by truck with the guys he never saw before and where he has never been. What he had in mind didn't matter at all. my beloved brother only counted as a tiny tiny part of the whole system.
I wish my brother was in better condition. and he'd have time to look back at himself.
 
안녕하세요. 많은 영어를 아는것같아요. 당신이 정말 정말 잘하시네요. :)
당신의 오빠는 괜찮아요?  그리고 글자를 대문자로 필요없거든요. ᄒᄒ 개인적인 선택이에요~

0
Capitalization Rules Capitalization Rules Capitalize the first word of a sentence Capitalize the pronoun "I" Capitalize proper nouns : persons, places / things, names of people • Capitalize North, South, East, and West when contained in the name of a place (state, country, etc.) but not when used for giving directions. Capitalize days of the week, holidays, and months of the year. Do not capitalize seasons. Capitalize countries, languages, and nationalities (adjective form of a specific country) Capitalize titles that come before names. Do not capitalize titles that follow names. Capitalize letter salutations (openings) and closings Capitalize the first word in a quote. Capitalize content words in titles. Capitalize the first word in each line of poetry
0

Capitalization <M<< please learn capitalization - it's so important.
Correction
Better way to say (He is > He's)

A Letter From My Brother

My family got a letter today. It was from my brother. He's been on call on military duty since last August.  In Korea, all healthy korean guys undergo a 20-month military service.
He wrote 'It was ok.' he will be changing military duties and begin a driving job soon. He thought of himself and our family during his work. He thanked us only because for calling and mailing him regularly. He met a variety of people from all over Korea. He thanked the family for giving him a proper education and financial support.
I remember the day when my brother left for the military camp. Dad drove the car to the camp ground where he was assigned  and about a thousand of young guys were there together with their families. A senior soldier with a green uniform shouted, "No money or anything not necessary. Clothes, shoes, watches, and everything else you brought with you now will be sent back to your house by post office."
He appeared to be anxious. My brother seemed like a chicken, awaiting to be sold to unknown place to an unknown fate. <<< this is better ) He was really a chicken. He'll travel by truck with the guys he's never seen in his life and to places where he's never been.  What he wants to do and what he thinks won't matter at all. My beloved brother counts only as a tiny tiny particle of the whole system.
I wish my brother would be in a better situation< ?. I wish he'd have more time to look back an reflect on his life. < if this is what you meant...

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today