English diary(to practise my writing,if there are some mistakes,please help me correct it ,thanks)
Today is sunday,Fisher and I also go to the library.Because it is mid autumn,the weather is getting colder and colder.Inorder to build up our strength and ont caught a cold we decide to do some pysical exercise.What kind of exercise should we take?Running,of course is a very good choice.At 6:30P.M. fisher and I go to the playground,due to the day time become shoter it's already getting dark.It's time to have dinner so there aren't many people in the playground.We decide to run five circles of the track.At first,I feel very relaxed but after the five circles I feel very tired,really,really tired! I'm almost out of breath and my head is covered with sweat.I think this must be the result of not doing exercise for such a long time.Regular exercise is significant for stay healthy so I make up my mind to persist running.
Today our college hold a debate competition and our class' team join the competition.Last year I also take part in the debate as the fourth debater.But unfortunately we lose the competition just one score lower.I felt very sad at that time.I wish our team good luck today.
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Today is sunday, Fisher and I also go to went to the library. Because it is mid autumn,the weather is getting colder and colder.In order to build up our strength and ont not caught catch a cold, we decided to do some physical exercise. What kind of exercise should we take? Running,of course is a very good choice. At 6:30 P.M. Fisher and I go went to the playground due to the day time become became shorter and it's already getting dark. It's time to have dinner so there aren't many people in the playground. We decided to run five circles (I think you mean round?) of the track. At first,I feel felt very relaxed but after the five circles rounds I feel felt very tired, really really tired! I'm almost out of breath and my head is covered with sweat. I think this must be the result of not doing exercise for such a long time. Regular exercise is significant for to stay healthy so I make made up my mind to persist running.
Today our college hold held a debate competition and our class' team joined the competition. Last year I also take took part in the debate as the fourth debater. But unfortunately we lose lost the competition by just one score lower.I felt very sad at that time.I wish our team good luck today.
Wow your English is very good, just be aware of using past tense since you're telling us a story which was in the past.
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Your words are in Italics, my corrections are strikethrough or in [square brackets] or in bold
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In order to build up our strength and ont caught not catch a cold [caught = past, catch = present]
due to the day time become shoter it's already getting dark. [it would be more normal to say "because the days are getting shorter, it's already getting dark"]
Regular exercise is significant for stay staying healthy so I make up my mind to persist with running.
Today our college hold is holding a debate competition and our class' team join is joining the competition.
Last year I also take took part in the debate as the fourth debater.But unfortunately we lose lost the competition just one score lower.
I hope that helps!! Very good writing though, these are just very minor corrections.
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Corrections: "physical", "Fisher", "significant to stay healthy", "Last year, I also/too took part"
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