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'Prompt' game The resounding of the drop of water, the remnant of a thunderous rain, which fell into a small puddle of water nearby, woke her up. All she could see through the dark narrow alley, are the tall buildings in their pompous gaiety and a shining bright full moon. She rose up with her feeble legs, that were exhausted by the journey it made to reach here. Taking the support of the dustbin beside her, she rose up thinking, "I should go find him, my only friend. I should never give up." "I hope I can find him in this city. I want to see him at least once before I vanish" She started walking towards the end of the valley, taking the umbrella by hand remembering the first time she met him on the snowy mountains. Then, no one took care of me. I was left alone by the herd. They were disgusted to see me, an abnormal one born in the herd. But, he was the only one who was not afraid of seeing me. Saying that I was the most beautiful rabbit he ever found. At first I was little afraid, by this unexpected hospitality. But, he kept on coming to see me. You should see his happiness when I came out of my hiding bush, mustering courage to greet my friend. We played daily, I don't know how many days passed by. But one day, he didn't come to play. He didn't come to see me. I waited for him for several weeks, but in vain. Finally, I decided to search for him in the neighboring town and resolved myself to meet him whatever the cost may be. I am attending a course named "Creative Writing" for this semester. In which we are asked to produce a Drama, as much long as possible, But since no one was able to come up with ideas. Our professor started this 'prompt' game, this is how I call it', in which we are given four random words. Using them we have to form a story in thirty seconds. This is the extended version of prototype story I came up with for the words, "thunder", "snow rabbit", "umbrella", "arrogant". Though I couldn't include the word "arrogant" in my story. The inspiration for the story is an anime called "Kanon" Kindly please correct it. Thank you.

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'Prompt' game

The resounding of the drop of water, the remnant of a thunderous rain, which fell into a small puddle of water nearby, woke her up. All she could see through the dark narrow alley (no comma here) are the tall buildings in their pompous gaiety and a shining bright full moon.

She rose up with her feeble legs (no comma here) that were exhausted by the journey it made to reach here. Taking the support of the dustbin beside her, she rose up thinking, "I should go find him, my only friend. I should never give up."

"I hope I can find him in this city. I want to see him at least once before I vanish."

She started walking towards the end of the valley, taking the umbrella by hand, remembering the first time she met him on the snowy mountains.

Then, no one took care of me. I was left alone by the herd. They were disgusted to see me, an abnormal one born in the herd.

But, he was the only one who was not afraid of seeing me. Saying that I was the most beautiful rabbit he ever found. At first I was a little afraid, by this unexpected hospitality. But, he kept on coming to see me. You should see his happiness when I came out of my hiding bush, mustering courage to greet my friend.

We played daily. I don't know how many days passed by. But one day, he didn't come to play. He didn't come to see me. I waited for him for several weeks, but in vain. Finally, I decided to search for him in the neighboring town and resolved myself to meet him whatever the cost may be.

 

Great job!!!!!!!!!!!  

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Thank you Haru. :) Yeah, only the prototype in 30 seconds. But the notebook entry took time. In our creative writing course, we have three segments: Poetry, Short Story and Drama. We were asked to write 6 poems on different themes, one short story of 5 pages and one Drama of 5 pages. Now, we are at the drama stage. I will send you the themes, write them in your free time and post. Yeah, Kanon is good one, Kanon 2006 is way better than old Kanon, if you want to watch.
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It's very touching. You come up with the story in 30 seconds. Wow. I didn't have such course like creative writing at university. It seems very useful and helpful to help us improve English writing. I haven't seen that anime Kanon yet. Guess it's a good one. :)
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Thanks for understanding. I hope I won't make you wait forever.:D
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Haha don't worry I understand ! Actually, I'm like you ! writing a short story is okay but my brain begins to overheat when it becomes too long =P Anyway, I'll wait for a pre-release version of your book ! ^-^

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