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Drug Legalization - Learning how to write in English! - I hope you help me to correct my mistakes. Talking about drug addiction in Colombia is a controversial issue due to it is a country affected by the violence drug dealing cause. Over the years, Colombia has seen how talking about drugs become a common topic in mass media, and also it becomes a problem on streets. As a consequence of drugs consumption, many people have been affected as in their family as in their social life. A few months ago, it started a discussion in Bogota’s mayoralty which proposes a kind of drug legalization. Bogota’s mayoralty pose to design several places to destine them to the controlled consumption of drugs, they say it would be a way to handle the uncontrolled handing of drugs. Nevertheless, it also would be seen a manner of accepting that drug consumption is approved in our society. Besides, we cannot know with accuracy whether drug legalization could be a good option to improve the quality life of those people who are dependant of drugs, may be they do not see this like a kind of helping because they probably could be pointed and judged in a bad way. As a conclusion, it is possible that a controlled way of drug consumption be a solution for society, it means that people could be more tolerant when they are close to a similar situation, but is truth it needs also that people be aware of consequences, bad or good, that drug legalization can carry. However, drugs are no good for people and it is better thinking in other possible solutions that do not involve legalization.

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Drug Legalization - Learning how to write in English! - I hope you help me to correct my mistakes.

Talking about drug addiction in Colombia is a controversial issue due to the way in which the country has been affected by violent drug trafficking. Over the years, Colombia has seen how talking about drugs become a common topic in mass media, and also it becomes a problem on streets (Not sure what you are trying to say in this sentence). As a consequence of drug consumption, many people's family and social life have been affected.

A few months ago, a discussion started from the mayor's proposal of a type of drug legalization. Bogota’s mayor proposed to design several places for the controlled consumption of drugs.  They say it would be a way to handle the uncontrolled handling of drugs. Nevertheless, it also would be seen as a way of accepting drug consumption in our society.

Besides, we cannot know with accuracy whether drug legalization could be a good option to improve the quality of life of those people who are dependant on drugs.  Maybe they do not think this looks helpful and may fear being criticized for its execution.

As a conclusion, it is possible that a controlled way of drug consumption could be a solution for society.  It means that people could be more tolerant when they are in a similar situation.  Lastly, people need to be aware of consequences, bad or good, that drug legalization can carry.
However, drugs are not good for people and it would be better to think of other possible solutions that do not involve legalization.

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