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Diary0820
It's quite difficult to find a topics to write about here, so I'll just use date as the title and record follow my nose what comes to mind. The ideal article might should be short, and can clearly express my meaning in English without any professional [this will be understood, but I think "formal" works better] words, I think.
Time flys, the date shows that.
There are a lot of things I need to do. Sometimes I'll it makes me feel a little anxious . . . I want to find a new job and prepare for the interviews, I want to pass my exam this October, I want to improve my English and expand my word bank vocabulary, I need to prepare for the my September travel and buy accouters [I'm not familiar with this word, 你的意思是什么?].
It is rainning outside; the weather in Shanghia is quite hot these days. I hope the rain will bring cool here [this will be understood; more naturally: ". . . will cool things down"].
(Maybe tomorrow I can write sth about J)
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Hey, again! This is actually very well-written, well done! Below, I wrote the way I'd write this, if it were my entry:
It's pretty hard to find things to write about every day, so I guess I'll just record the date as the title and write what comes to mind. I think an ideal notebook entry should be short, and clearly express my thoughts in English without any formal words.
Time flies --- that much is clear from the date. There are a lot of things I need to do; it makes me anxious, sometimes. I want to find a new job and prepare for the interviews, I want to pass my exam this October, I want to improve my English and expand my vocabulary, I need to prepare to travel in September . . .
It's raining out [or: "It's rainy."] The weather in Shanghai has been rather hot recently; I hope it'll cool off a bit with the rain.
Again, if you have any questions about my phrasing, let me know! I can always try to explain. This is very good, though, keep it up.
Best,
沈飞达
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