First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning english, because I want to work in New York, make friends from worldwide...
My native language is Portuguese, and I grew up in Brasil.

CORRECTED:

I am learning Englishbecause I want to work in New Yorkand make friends worldwide.
My native language is Portuguese and I grew up in Brasil.

SUGGESTION:

I am learning Englishbecause I want to work in New Yorkand make friends from around the world. I come from Brasil and speak Portugese.

The "corrected" paragraph is using your own words and just correcting grammar or capitalization, and the like. The "suggested" paragraph is using your intended meaning but writing it in a more common fashion.

You are very understandable in your writing so I hope you continue. I wish you the best in your language studies. Good luck!! :)

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning English, because I want to work in New York, make friends from worldwide/ from around the world ...
My native language is Portuguese, and I grew up in Brasil.