aya's notebook entry: Aug 22, 2010

昨日、両親と一緒に花火大会に行ってきました。

日本では、花火は夏の風物詩の一つです。
夏の風物詩には花火の他にもスイカや海、風鈴などたくさんあります。しかし、私はその中でも花火が一番好きです。

夏もあと残り１０日。
私にとってこの花火大会が今年最後の花火大会となるでしょう。

Yesterday, I went to the fireworks festival with my parents.

Fireworks are one of the summer traditional events in Japan.
In Japan, the fireworks festival is one of the traditional events held in summer. (is = one. are = two or more.) 

The seasonal traditions are called 風物詩 (Hubutsushi) in Japanese.

There are a lot of summer’s Hubutsushi, such as watermelon, sea and hurin (wind-bell?).
In summer, there are a lot of...
Of them, I like fireworks the most.
Out of them all, (Almost!! But this way, the reader knows that a comparison is being made.) 

The summer season ends in ten days.
The summer season will end in ten days. (It has yet to occur or happen, so 'will end' sounds better.)

This fireworks festival is the final festival this year for me.
...one for me this year. 

I hope this helps. You certainly write well. Keep up the great work!! 

aya's notebook entry: Aug 22, 2010

昨日、両親と一緒に花火大会に行ってきました。

日本では、花火は夏の風物詩の一つです。
夏の風物詩には花火の他にもスイカや海、風鈴などたくさんあります。しかし、私はその中でも花火が一番好きです。

夏もあと残り１０日。
私にとってこの花火大会が今年最後の花火大会となるでしょう。

Yesterday, I went to the fireworks festival with my parents.

Fireworks are one of the summer traditional events in Japan.
(Fireworks festival is one of the summer traditional events in Japan. )

The seasonal traditions are called 風物詩 (Hubutsushi) in Japanese.
There are a lot of summer’s Hubutsushi, such as watermelon, sea and hurin (wind-bell?).
Of them, I like fireworks the most.
(Among them)

The summer season ends in ten days.
(The summer season will end in ten days. )
This fireworks festival is the final festival this year for me.


That's just my two cents, and i hope my corrections r right. (*^__^*)
And i am interested in Japanese, but i just know little.
Anyway, nice to meet u~~~

aya's notebook entry: Aug 22, 2010

昨日、両親と一緒に花火大会に行ってきました。

日本では、花火は夏の風物詩の一つです。
夏の風物詩には花火の他にもスイカや海、風鈴などたくさんあります。しかし、私はその中でも花火が一番好きです。

夏もあと残り１０日。
私にとってこの花火大会が今年最後の花火大会となるでしょう。

Yesterday, I went to the a fireworks festival with my parents.

Fireworks are one of the a summer traditional events in Japan.


The seasonal traditions are called 風物詩 (Hubutsushi) in Japanese.
There are a lot of summer’s Hubutsushi, such as watermelon, sea and hurin (wind-bell?).
Of these, I like fireworks the most.
(風物詩 doesn't seem to have a good english translation. According to my dictionary the closest is "Thing that remind you of the season". Tradition is fine, but "Things that are characteristic of summer" or "things that remind you of summer" might be closer. This is only my opinion though, I could be very wrong!)

The summer season ends in ten days.
This fireworks festival is the final festival this of the year for me.
(If you mean this is the last festival you will attend "The fireworks festival is the last festival of the year I will attend" might be better. "The fireworks festival is the final festival of the year for me" sounds more like you are saying there are no other festivals you acknowledge from now until the end of the year (which may be true ^^))