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Study articles "the, an, a" when to use.
Spelling - USE a dictionary if you are not sure! DICTONARY  - Too many spelling errors.
Study past tense of verbs. PAST TENSE
? = Question  PUNCTUATION
Slow down and check your spelling --- use a dictionary too.
I think you can speak English well, but your spelling, past tense and particle work -  you need to study.

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This is the rest of my son's writing after reading

In the next music class, Mr. Hynde was teaching purcusion. He hit things with a ruler and tapdanced with a  trash can on his foot. And a  he made a wierd drumming nose with his mouth. He calls that music? A few days later it seemed like it was the end of the world. The TV had started. And it was so horrible. <<<< spelling))))) Andrea and Emily were complaining and moaning to Mr. Hynde. blah, blah, blah, blah, blah blah...

Miss Daisy said, "Line up" and eveyone in the class said "Line up for what?" "It's time for music class with Mr. Hynde." "Boo!!" Andrea and Emily said. "Yippie!!" everybody said. In the music class we're going  to play a game. It's name is "Beauty and the Beast." The Beauty was Andrea and the Beast was A. J. A. J. who would torture her. But at the end of the script, the Beauty and the Beast would kiss. We rehearsed and rehearsed and rehearsed. This seemed to torture Andrea but it
was fun. In the end they had to kiss. The kissing part they didn't rehearse.

It was friday night. The big kissing with Andrea. A. J. was pretending hard that Andrea was a dirt bike. "dirt bike, dirt bike, dirt bike, dirt bike.' It was the time the kiss. But Andrea didn't kiss. She sang a song. That dumb sun will come out tomorow song. It was horrible. But it was great. At least he didn't have to kiss Andrea. Well that was close. The singing was not in the script.

A few days later in music class Mr. Hynde wasn't in school. He was on the Idol TV show called Idol. Mr. Hynde sang and sang sang and sang and won and won and won and won. It was the most amazing thing in the history of the world. How could he do that? Finally he won he won he really won. He sang well. Mr. Hynde hit it big.

The next music class Mr. Hynde was really late. Finally the door opened. You won't believe your eyes. There was Mr. Loring. As boring as ever! They were all sad. To cheer us up, he sang Who stole the cookie from the cookie jar. "Not that song!"

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the rest of my son's writing after reading

The next music class, Mr. Hynde had taught purcusion. He hit things with a ruler and tapdanced with a trash can on his foot. He also made a weird druming nose with his mouth. He calls that music!! A few days later it was the end of the world. The TV turn of the month had started. It was so horrible. Andrea and Emily were complaning and moaning to Mr. Hynde. bla, bla, bla, bla, blabla...

Miss Daisy said, "Line up" Evey one in the class said "line up for what?" "It's time for music class with Mr. Hynde." "Boo!!" Andrea and Emily said. "Yeapie!!" every body said. In the music class we have a play. It's name is "Beauty and the Beast." The Beauty was Andrea and the Beast was A. J. A. J. can torture her. However, in the end of the script, the Beauty and the Beast kiss. We reahersed and reahersed and reahersed. torturing Andrea
It was fun. However, in the end they have to kiss. We didn't reaherse the kissing part.

It was friday night. The big kiss with Andrea. A. J. was concentrating and pretending Andrea was a dirt bike. "dirt bike, dirt bike, dirt bike, dirt bike.' It was the time the kiss. However, Andrea didn't kiss. She sang a song. She sang "That dumb sun will come out tomorow". It was horoble. However, it was great. At least he didn't kiss Andrea. Well that was close. singing was not in the script.

A few days later in music class Mr. Hynde was not in school. He was on the TV show called Idol show. Mr. Hynde sang and sang sang and sang and won. It was the most amazing thing in the history of the world. How could he do that ?? Finally he won. He really won. He can sing good. Mr. Hynde hit it big.

On the night of the next music class Mr. Hynde was realy late. Finaly the door opened. I couldn't believe my eyes. There was Mr. Loring. As boring as ever! They were all sad. My Loring tried to cheer us up by singing who stole the cookie from the cookie jar. "Not that song!"

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