Different culture..if you can help me to revise my essay~
As illustrated by the cartoon, we can see a big hotpot full of different cultures as its ingredients. Such as Daoism, Confu and some other things. Because of the hotpot full of different ingredients. So it seems like yummy and nutritious.
I belief that this cartoon implies an irresistible trend that the world is becoming a whole. Every culture or country makes joint efforts to build a new world. So different cultures lay aside their difference and try to reach a compromise over the current situation. I have to say our country’s goal is to foster and implement a cultural plural and establish a harmonious society. So we need to absorb different cultures. But we need to take the essence and discard the dregs. Exploit to the full one’s favorable conditions and avoid unfavorable ones. I suppose only in this can bring the full play to cultural power of the masses.
Thus, as for us, the young people. We should expand our scope of knowledge ,keeping pace with the latest development of the world. Meanwhile, when we enjoy the cultural hotpot do not forget our traditional and classic cultures. Learn to strike a balance between the diversification and the traditional. Only in this way can we move our development in the right direction.
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Different Cultures (..if you can please help me to revise my essay~)
As illustrated by the cartoon, we can see that Chinese society is a complex mixture full of many different cultures and belief systems. Since the hot-pot is full of a wide-range of ingredients, it must be delicious and nutritious. I believe that this cartoon also implies that the countries of the world are becoming a whole. Thus, all countries should make a conscious and concerted effort towards recognizing this reality and focus on building a new world reflective of this goal.
If China's goal is to develop and foster a harmonious society, it must cherish and safeguard its cultural diversity. In assimilating different cultures, we need to preserve the essence, yet, discard the dregs of them since, only in this way, can a culture's full power be brought to the masses. Therefore, as China's youngest generation, we should aim to expand both the depth and scope of one's knowledge, in order to keep pace with the latest developments of the world.
Similarly, while we enjoy the cultural hotpot of China's future, let us not forget the rich and varied traditions of the nation's past. For it is only by learning to strike the proper balance between the two, can we expect to move China's development in the right direction.
A nice essay! I hope the above is what you were looking for, but I really wasn't certain as to what you wanted! Your ideas and concepts are good, but your vocabulary and composition need to catch up. Keep writing and keep posting, it will all come together for you soon enough! With best regards... J.
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