My Little Prince

When I was in middle school, God gave me a lovely prince. He is my nephew. We call him Baobao. He is 8 years old. His eyes are big and bright, and they make him resemble a fawn.  His skin is the color of egg white (this isn't something I'd say though) and hey says very interesting things.

When Baobao was 4 years old, he said he would marry me.  I felt very happy until my sister told me that Baobao also had said that he would marry her.

But now Baobao does not want to marry me at all, he likes a girl in his class. One day over summer break (or summer vacation) I played with him.  He wanted the toy car that I was holding, but I told him I wouldn’t give it to him unless he marreid me. He shrugged his shoulders and said, "Ok, I will marry you, little aunt." (little aunt sounds funny to me)


I wish my little prince Baobao can grow up healthy and be happy. 

My Little Prince Don't forget to capitalize words in the title!

When I was in middle school, God give sent me a lovely handsome prince. You see, he is my nephew. We always call him Baobao - meaning "precious". Now he is 8 years old. His eyes are bright, clear and big like those of a fawn. His complexion is clear and white like the snow.  eyes make him like a deerlet , his skin like egg white and what he said is interesting . We don't compare the skin like egg white in English.  It's icky to native English speakers.

When Baobao is 4 was four years old, he said told me that he would will marry me. ,I feel very happy was delighted until my sister told me that Baobao he also had said told her that he would marry her too.

But However, now Baobao now does not want to marry me at after all. , he like the There is this girl in his class... One day in summer holiday, as I was playing ed with him, he wanted the toy car that was in my hands. , But I said that I didn’t would not give it to him unless he marries me. He shrugged Shrugging his shoulders, isulders ,he said: answered,

"Ok, I'll will marry you, small little auntie."

I once listen to a Tang poetry which Baobao recited. He said : wei cheng zhao yu yi qing chen, ke she qing qing hiu se xin. I was surprised at the pinyin of “hiu” for the correct pronunciation is “liu”. At the same time, I rarely heard the pinyin of “hiu”and I didn’t remember I had heard. what a clever prince I have, he maybe creat a new pinyin and also give the “liu” a new name. You should not write something like this.  This is because you cannot assume all who read your essay understand Chinese.  This is bad writing. Even though I can understand Chinese, I don't know pinyin.  If you write it Chinese, I may be able to translate and flesh out the idea you wanted to convey and express it in English.  Your conclusion is good enough to stand on its own without the preceeding paragraph.

I wish my little prince Baobao can will grow up healthily and being be happy everyday.