Since you like people to point out your mistakes, ff this is the case, then I shall point out your basic mistakes.  After you have corrected them, send me the link of your essay to me so that I can start correcting your grammar, sentence structure and how native speaker express.

1.  我 = I.  No exception.  You must capitalize all the "i" no matter where it appears.

2.  Capitalize all your proper nouns.  Names of countries, languages etc are proper nouns. Hence it is English not "english".  Chinese, not "chinese".

3.  Leave a space after a comma.  Two after a period.

4.  You don't need a comma before conjunctions such as "and", "or" etc.

5.  I treat all note entries as formal essays.  So don't use slang, like "wanna", "ok", "ur".  Don't use contractions, such as "don't".  You see me using them here.  These are comments.  So I don't treat them as formal sentences.

6.  Don't put all those internet smileys.  They don't belong to formal essays.

7.  Don't use "have a nice day" at the end.  You are not a sales girl.

I am telling you all this, is that it is very important to use proper English.  I just hope you are not being lazy to use capitals.  I assume that you just don't know.  Now that you know....  Refer to my previous correction and see the colored corrections.

Also read Benben's entry,

http://www.italki.com/notebook/entry/188702.htm

Thanks for your kind to help me^^so happy

Its the second day today i come to here,i wrote 2 small composition yesterday,and some people helped me to correct wrong,though i wrote many wrong and silly sentence , but thanks for ur patient to help my embarrasing english , i feel happy when you tell me where i make wrong ,the more ,the better.
Once i hate english,because i learnt it only for boring school exam,have no chance to use it for comunication.my oral english is poor .
Though now my english is not good, but i am very confident to study it better, i will study harder than before.
I am a chinese,so if you have any questions about chinese,tell me ,i will try my best to help you.
i will write more as long as time permits. essentially i like writting,i had keep diary 8 years. please help me,ok? ^^tell me wrong sentences.
In addition,i wanna know more about westerners speak habits ,and culture,i am afraid because of culture difference ,i may make others sad.
Thats all ,have a nice day,friends!

This is from your last corrected essay :)

Thanks for your kindness to in helping me.

It is 1 the Today is my second day today I come to here. , I had written wrote 2 2 two small compositions yesterday and some people helped me to corrected my errors wrong. Though I wrote there are many mistakes, wrong and silly sentence , I thanks you for your patient patience. to help my embarrasing English , I feel happy when you tell me where I made them make wrong, the more, the better it is for me.

Once I hated English, because I learnt it only for the boring school exam.  , I did not have no the chance to use it for communication.  My oral English is poor. Though now my english is not good, but I am very confident that it will become better if I to study it better, I will study harder than before.

I am a Chinese, so if you have any questions about Chinese, tell me , I hope that I can answer them to your satisfaction. will try my best to help you.

I will write more as long as time permits. Essentially I like writting, I had keep kept a diary for 8 eight years.  Please help me, tell me wrong sentences.  I thank you in advance.

In addition At the same time 3, I want to know more about how westerners speak habits and about their culture, but I am afraid ask because of culture cultural differences and ask what is inappropriate.  , I may make others sad.

That is all , I thank you all in advance.  , Friends!

孺子可教 :)  You can ask me any question you like.  To me, you are learning a culture that is very different from yours.  If you don't ask, you will never know.  Therefore, if a question is inappropriate, I shall let you know and still will answer accordingly.  So don't worry.  Just go ahead and ask.

1.  The two words, "its" and "it's" are totally different.  "its" is a possessive case of the neuter noun.  "it's" is the contraction of "it is".  The apostrophe mark is very important.

2.  In formal essays, you must spell out simple numerals in full.  Instead of 100, use "a hundred"; 45 as "forty five".  However, you don't need to spell out numbers that indicate dollar amounts.  Just use "$2.45".  This is the same with time, "2:45pm", temperature, 65F or a plain decimal number, 1.234.  Non simple fractions such as 3/8.  If there are names for fractions such as 1/2, 3/4, use half and three quarters instead.  Of course there is a special case for such fractions when you are using them for a receipe.  This is to make the visual form consistent with other non-simple fractions.

3.  What you have written is not wrong.  However, the word sounds too formal here.  You want to have a warmer atmosphere.  It is like writing a formal Chinese essay to your superior vs an informal one to your friend for help.  You do not want to sound cold.