Chinese Speech Revised

Does this sound about right? I have to give a speech in class either tomorrow or on Friday.

大家好！我叫韦凯伶。今天我的话题是照顾孩子，我的工作就是照顾孩子,我也很喜欢这份工作。我的邻居有很多孩子，我照顾的孩子的年龄段是两岁到十二岁。我常常和他们一起在他们的家玩。我一个小时转十块钱，一个星期工作十个小时。他们的父母也很乐于让我照顾他们，因为他们的孩子很爱我。我爱这些孩子。谢谢大家！

Hello! My name is WeiKailing. My topic today is babysitting. My job is babysitting, I really love this job! My neighborhood has lots of kids. I babysit children from the ages of 2-12. I often play with them at their house. I earn ten dollars an hour and I work ten hours a week. Their parents are willing to let me take care of them because their kids love me so much. I love the kids I babysit! Thanks!

I often play with them at their house.In Chinese that means "我常常和他们一起在他们家玩。".You can say "他们家" instead of "他们的家".And "earn money " translate into Chinese is "赚钱" ,not "转钱"。"赚" makes the fourth sound and "转" makes the third sound.And their meaning is also different.

Chinese Speech Revised

Does this sound about right? I have to give a speech in class either tomorrow or on Friday.

      大家好！

      我叫韦凯伶。今天我的话题是照顾孩子。

      我的工作就是照顾孩子,我很喜欢这份工作。我照顾的孩子的年龄段是从两岁到十二岁。我的邻居有很多孩子，我常常和他们一起，在他们的家里玩耍。我一个小时转赚十块钱，一个星期工作十个小时。他们的父母也很乐于意让我照顾他们，因为他们的孩子很爱我。我也爱这些孩子。谢谢大家！

Hello! My name is WeiKailing. My topic today is babysitting. My job is babysitting, I really love this job! I babysit children from the ages of 2-12. My neighborhood has lots of kids. I often play with them at their house. I earn ten dollars an hour and I work ten hours a week. Their parents are willing to let me take care of them because their kids love me so much. I love the kids I babysit! Thank s!

I saw,I came,I refine it for you~It's me,Cheng,(*^__^*) 

Chinese Speech Revised

Does this sound about right? I have to give a speech in class either tomorrow or on Friday.

大家好！我叫韦凯伶。今天我的话题是照顾孩子，我的工作就是照顾孩子,我也很喜欢这份工作。我的邻居有很多孩子，我照顾的孩子的年龄段是两岁到十二岁。我常常和他们一起在他们的家玩。（我常常去他们家玩）我一个小时转 （赚）十块钱，一个星期工作十个小时。他们的父母也很乐于让我照顾他们，因为他们的孩子很爱我。我爱这些孩子。谢谢大家！

Hello! My name is WeiKailing. My topic today is babysitting. My job is babysitting, I really love this job! My neighborhood has lots of kids. I babysit children from the ages of 2-12. I often play with them at their house. I earn ten dollars an hour and I work ten hours a week. Their parents are willing to let me take care of them because their kids love me so much. I love the kids I babysit! Thanks!

Well,generally it's well-written,except for some minor mistakes:

我常常和他们一起在他们的家玩 It's a little bit redundant here,a preferred way to express this meaning in Chinese is 我常常去他们家玩.

转 means turn，转弯，向左转 turn left，转变，change.It should be '赚’.

Are you going to blow the class away? O(∩_∩)O

Happy every day！(⊙o⊙)…