Corrections · 3
Dear Katee,
This is a great story! Basically, you express yourself very well, so I am not going to go over every single error. I'm not so sure that going over every error is the most helpful thing to do, so I think I will just focus on one thing: verb tense. I'll stick to issues of simple past and present tense in a narrative. I'll make comments in the comments section.
Mainly past tense is used to narrate a story, but storytellers can use present tense as well. The point is, you have to be consistent with whichever you choose.
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Unfortunately, there was something wrong with operation system of the subway.
Too many people were [actually, this is a S-V agreement problem, not tense] gathering there and waiting along the track.
I guessed I would have to take a taxi in case of lateness.
After I got there, I'd [No need for perfect tense here; if you wanted to say, "Before I got there, I had filled..." that would be a place to use perfect tense.] filled out the form about my personal information.
Another unfortunate thing happened to me.
...so I said "I have something to do and can't go back to my office." [We use present tense here because it's a quote of what you said at that time.]
Then I couldn't concentrate on this test, but I had to do it.
After this, it's not end it still wasn't over. I had to have a face-to-face interview.
Finally, I had to take a taxi to go back.
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I always enjoy your journals because you have interesting stories!
~ Ned
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