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Things we don't Need I think we spend too much money on things we don't really need. For example I bought the last mobile model. It's very cool but really unnecessary. I also spend a lot of money on brand clothes. Or worse still, my friends buy cheap and bad quality clothes, of course, always in style. I think we buy because we don’t know exactly we want and we fall in hidden persuasions of big stores. Moreover we believe we choose a product when in fact are being induced what we see on TV. If we chose more consciously we could save a lot of money that could use to more important things as know value items and things to improve our health and quality of life.

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Things We Don't Need

I think we spend too much money on things we don't really need. For example, I bought the last mobile model. It's very cool, but really unnecessary. I also spend a lot of money on brand brand name clothes. Or worse still, my friends buy cheap and bad quality clothes, of course, always in style.

I think we buy because we don’t know exactly what we want and we fall in  (There are several ways to say what you mean: ¨fall prey to... (common English expression)¨ or ¨are persuaded by...¨)  hidden persuasions of  the hidden messages of big stores. Moreover, we believe we choose a product when in fact we are being induced by what we see on TV. 

If we chose more consciously we could save a lot of money that could be used  to for more important things, such as (¨such as¨ or ¨like¨) know value items and things to improve our health and quality of life.

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Things we don't Need

I think we spend too much money on things we don't really need. For example I bought the latest mobile model.

 

(The rest of this was corrected already and I am only making a very minor correction.)

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I would only change Kalynne´s very nice correction to thusly: "the last" to "the latest" but otherwise I could go with all of her corrections. Very nicely done, Take care everyone, Shira
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Very thoughtful and well-written, David.

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