Retelling A Story--On The Demise of the Six States

Recently I read a Chinese book which collects about ancient Chinese classical proses. I came across a prose talking that discusses about the collapse of some Six States of the Age of Warring States in ancient China. I just try to would like to retell the article in English. I am not sure about whether you can understand it or not, 1 If am not not clear, I am sorry but I do hope you can give me some suggestions in terms of the word usage and the grammar.

On The Demise of the Six States

The demise of the six vassal states This is not because they did not have sharp good weaponry or they were unskillful untrained in the skills of organized warefare. in fighting. The real reason is that some of them states bribed the State of Qin in one form or another , which resulted in the loss of their power and prestige in the eyes of the Qin.  their ensuing demise. Someone asked," Have all the six collapsed Did all the states bribed Qin?" The answer is that although some states did not bribe Qin, they still failed to survive because they lost powerful support from those who did. bribed Qin. So it is said that the real reason lies in that Hence the reason for "some states bribed Qin".

Apart from the land it won by means of war, Qin also got received small towns or big cities from the as bribery offered by other states. These towns and cities were much more than the land it won by war. Much of what is acquired by Qin is through this means rather as war booty.  Also, the towns and cities the vassal states lost were much more than all they lost in failed wars. Therefore, what Qin wants most and what the vassal states worry most were not the war. Qin wanted land and the other states worry about war.

The forefathers of the Six States worked toiled in frost and dew at dawns and to overcome all kinds of difficulties in order to win a few inches of land. However, their descendents did not cherish the land and gave it casually to others like throwing worthless grass away. They cut gave up five cities today,  and ten tomorrow to give them to Qin so that they could seek for appeasement 2for a one night-long of peace and harmony. When getting up the second Upon waking the next day, they found that soldiers of Qin came knocking at the door again. The land of the vassal states is limited, while the greed of Qin is limitless. The more frequently the vassal states bribed Qin, the more eagerly Qin wanted to invade. Why go to war when such threats worked so beautifully?

Therefore, without war, it does not take an idiot to figure out who is strong and who is weak are already evident. Then it is not surprising that all the vassal states fell at last. No surprise when all the Six States vanished into the stomach of the hungry Qin wolf.  The ancients said well, "Bribing Qin with land is just like trying to put out a fire with wood. The fire will can never be put out if the wood was always served." The lines were so true. So true but no one heeded, as good medicine tastes most bitterly. 2

1.  You are insulting the intelligence of your readers regardless if your essay is understandable or not.  Translate into Chinese and you see what I mean.  Words are as dangerous as sharp weapons.

2.   Same as those peacemongers like the British Prime Minister Neville Chamberlain to appease Hitler and nowadays to those oppose the wars in Iraq and Afganistan.  One has to be 快刀斬亂麻!

3.  You conclusion is weak.  So I beef it up with another Chinese saying.