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I loved you I want to share with you one fragment of the translations of Pushkin's novel "Eugene Onegin".. It's very beautiful, I hope you like it) I have 3 versions of the same fragment. What do you think it's better? I loved you; and I probably still do, And for awhile the feeling may remain - But let my love no longer trouble you: I do not wish to cause you any pain. I loved you; and the hopelessness I knew The jealousy, the shyness - though in vain - Made up a love so tender and so true As may God grant you to be loved again. ______ I loved you; and perhaps I love you still, The flame, perhaps, is not extinguished; yet It burns so quietly within my soul, No longer should you feel distressed by it. Silently and hopelessly I loved you, At times too jealous and at times too shy. God grant you find another who will love you As tenderly and truthfully as I. _____ I loved you, and that love, to die refusing, May still - who knows! - be smouldering in my breast Pray be not pained - believe me, of my choosing I'd never have you troubled or distressed. I loved you mutely, hopelessly and truly, With shy yet fervent tenderness aglow; Mine was a jealous passion and unruly... May God grant that another'll love you so!

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I loved you

I want to share with you one a translated fragment of the translations of Pushkin's novel "Eugene Onegin".. It's very beautiful, I hope you like it)
I have 3 three versions of the same fragment. What Which one do you think it's is the best 1 better?

I loved you; and I probably still do,
And for awhile the feeling may remain -
But let my love no longer trouble you:
I do not wish to cause you any pain.
I loved you; and the hopelessness I knew
The jealousy, the shyness - though in vain -
Made up a love so tender and so true
As may God grant you to be loved again.

______
I loved you; and perhaps I love you still,
The flame, perhaps, is not extinguished; yet
It burns so quietly within my soul,
No longer should you feel distressed by it.
Silently and hopelessly I loved you,
At times too jealous and at times too shy.
God grant you find another who will love you
As tenderly and truthfully as I.


_____
I loved you, and that love, to die refusing,
May still - who knows! - be smouldering in my breast
Pray be not pained - believe me, of my choosing
I'd never have you troubled or distressed.
I loved you mutely, hopelessly and truly,
With shy yet fervent tenderness aglow;
Mine was a jealous passion and unruly...
May God grant that another'll love you so!

Sorry, I don't know Russian to know which translation is better.  All expresses the same sentiment yet with nuances very different from one another.  The best translation is the one that best captures the intent of Pushkin while using the best way to express in English.

1.  Better is used for comparison (two) and best is superlative (more than two).  Good, better, best.

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"I don" = my mistake. I mean "I chose the second."
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Very beautiful love poem. I don I chose the second.
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Love!I like this poem.Thankyou
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Dear Katya!))) wow, I'm so ashamed. You are absolutely right!) I would like to hope my mistake will be the reason of the increase of interest in Pushkin's poem %))) ufff.. THANK YOU FOR YOUR COMMENT!)

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