Hello!

     I want to make a friends who live in other countries!

Nice to meet you.  맞는 구두점을 사용해 주세요
My name is Dain Kim. You can call me Dain.
I'm a Korean student who is studying at the University of Newcastle, Australia.
I've been here for 2 years but I still can't speak English fluently.
I need to improve my English ability especially my listening and speaking.
I hope to meet good friends here on/at Italki and improve my English!

우리가좋은친구가되길바래요.  여기에서제친구들과 열심히공부하고 있어요. 이건저에게아주큰도전이에요. 우리는배우기가열심해요.   둘은서로의에세이가항상수정해볼거예요. 우리가  서로의글을꾸준히수정해주면우정이계속될수있어요. 당신의영어능력을향상할수있다면, 전계속수정할거에요.하루에에세이하나씩만써주세요.  그거면충분해요. 양보다질이더중요해요.   짧은글을쓰면(쓰시다면/ 쓰려면), 드릴게요 / 고쳐드릴게요.   다른에세이를  곧쓸거에요.봐주시면감사하겠어요.

그건대문자로써야합니다. 

바꿔쓸수있는표현, 또는나의추천입니다. 

이건더자연스럽거나더일반적인방법의표현입니다.

오타, 또는수정이필요한부분그리고단어의순서, 단어의선택이나철자를고쳤습니다. 

밑줄을있을때, 맞은구두점과띄어쓰기를사용해주세요.       

보라색  제코멘트입니다.               

------ (이것이도움이됐으면좋겠습니다)

Hello! I want to make a foreign some friends from abroad!

Nice to meet you :D
My name is Dain Kim. U You can call me Dain.
I'm a Korean student who is studying in University of Newcastle, Australia.
I've been here for 2 years but I still cannot speak English fluently.
I need to improve my English ability especially listening and speaking.
I hope to meet good friends here from Italki and learn English!