I miss you all
dear friends , I really miss you all ! I want to talk with you ,and play with you. life is always beautiful and busy. I have moved schoolyard from one to another, so I couldn't connect the internet these days .By the way ,I find a job near my school,so I am not free in the daytime. hope everybody happy every day! haha
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I miss you all
Dear friends , I really miss you all ! I want to talkNotes:
The phrase in pink is optional but it helps improve the flow of your sentence.
What do you mean by schoolyard? Do you mean a dorm or dormitory? The word 'schoolyard' reminds me of the word 'playground' in American English.
I changed "play with you" to "spend time with you" since the phrase "play with you" can sound a bit young.
You sound very casual and native-like when you start the sentence with "Hope everybody's..."
Since you are an advanced learner of English, I replaced "happy everyday" with "doing well" since this is a more commonly used phrase in America.
Hope this helps!
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That's fantastic! I'm sure you're going to be extremely successful in the future =)
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About the new part-time job ,it is not a big deal. I have performed very well. It is about marketing and e-business, and I am good at it ..hope everybody’s doing well!
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Congratulations on your new job! How is it so far?
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