let me know my mistakes please! :)

Well I am an English learner who wants to improve my writing. My level is not good. However, I wanna want to try to learn. I do not care if I make mistakes; I am going to learn with it ! Mistakes are not bad because I can learn a lot of this way. 

So I gonna  am going to try to translate some songs from Spanish to English. If you are interesed in helping me, Thanks so much from the bottom of my heart! :D

TORNASOL
By La Gusana Ciega

We are waiting,
your change of season
your vision of rain
your new confusion
Maybe not, I will be
who can decipher you.

Your child costume,
hides your mission
your game discovers you
storm of passion,
Maybe today, I will be
who can decipher you.

You return to be
my dreams, my sweet siren
You returns to be
the sun that burns the stars,
Sunflowers spend hours without being able to kiss you
You return to be
Suddenly the universe.

Each time they change
Color your dreams.
Look so different,
your skin is tornasol
Your reason,
is a endless fusion.

You return to
my dreams, my sweet siren
You return to
the sun that burns the stars,
Sunflowers spend hours without being able to kiss you
You returns to be
Suddenly the universe.

I do not think you know
what it feels like falling from the parasol
to intermittent sleep
From light to the bottom of your expected
where everything revolves and then slowly ...

You returns to be
my dreams, my sweet siren
You returns to be
the sun that burns the stars,
Sunflowers spend hours without being able to kiss you
You returns to be
Suddenly the universe.




Ok. This is my first translatation.  Please let me know all my mistakes. I wanna learn English!! Thanks so much everyone!! :D

* wanna/gonna cannot be used for writing unless it is in a qoute of someone speaking. * * * Contractions (don't, can't, etc) are used in speaking, but not in writing.                            * Punctuation issue. Mainly keep sententences short by adding periods where needed, and eliminated unnecessary commas. 

I did my best to edit your entry to academic standards.  The poem translation is flawless (except for the -s on return) as far as I can tell, since the original is not provided. 

You are doing great with English. Keep going!   Chao!