First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi, everyone here, I'm so happy to have become a member of italki.
I'm currently a high school student now, and I am really into English because I want to study abroad and I’m also an English buff. 

"...coz i wanna..." is only used by people who failed English at school.

So I am delighted to join you. 

What's more, I am an optimistic girl, as well as a talented girl. Although I am a high school student, I am not a bookworm at all. I am a leader of my school dancing team, and i like making friends. Meantime As well as that, I also study hard and get a great marks in my course. So I am really pround of myself, because I am able to balance my hobbies as well as my study career. At this moment, I think studying aborad is the best choice for me so that I may have the freedom to do whatever I want to do, and to be whoever I want to be.
Therefore, I must make my every effort to study English and get a good grade in IELTST. This is the fundamental reason why I am here now. And I would also like to get help from all my new friends.

Nice to meet you!

Hi,everyone here, I'm so happy for becoming a member of italk. -> Hi, everyone. I'm so happy to be able to become a member of italki.

I'm a highschool student now and i really into English coz i wanna study abroad and I’m a English buff. -> I'm a high school student now and I'm really into English because I want to study abroad. [I guess you can call me an English buff.] This can make you sound very natural.

So I am delighted to join you. -> Good!

what is more,i am a optimistic girl as well as a talented girl. -> What's more, I'm not only an optimistic girl but also a talented girl.

Though I am a highschool student I am not a bookworm at all. -> Good!

I am a leader of my school dancing team,and i like making friends, -> I'm a/the leader of my school dancing team and I like making friends. If there is more than one leader of your school dancing team, then you use a. If you are the only leader, then you use the.

Meantime,i also study hard and get a great marks in my course. -> In the meantime, I also study hard and get great marks in my classes.

So i do really pround of myslfe for i can balance my favourit as well as my study career. -> So I'm really proud of myself for being able to balance my hobbies with my studying.

At this point,i think study aborad is the best choice for me so that i can have enough freedom to to whtever i want to do,to be whoever i want to be.-> At this point, I think studying abroad is the best choice for me so that I can have the freedom to do whatever I want to do and to be whoever I want to be.

Therefor,i must do my every effort to study english and get a good gread in IELTST. -> Therefore, I must make every effort to study English and get a good score on the IELTS.

This is the simple reason why i am here now. -> That's the reason I'm here now.

And i wanna get help from all my friends. -> And I want to receive help from all my friends.

I'm glad that you were able to show off some of your skills in English (some people are a bit scared to use new sentence patterns and such) and I think if you keep on working hard, you'll be able to be fluent in no time! Very good job! ^-^