waiting for help ——i need to know where i've made syntax errors（English）

Hi everybody,i've translated a chinese song into english,and i need to know where i've made syntax errors (words and grammar),waiting for your help .^^.
thanks a lot.

《Cold-blooded animal》
冷血动物


Always have one day everything will flow down,and no the earth anymore
Goggle at the moon,(it) still hanging in the clouds
And floating on the water

Mine is in blue while yours is in black.  I try to translate as closely to the Chinese as possible.  However there are some additions that makes it sound more natural in English.  I am sure there are others who are much better than me.

我在水里，也上陆地，阳光照射着我没有意义
I’m in the water,also on the land,sun shines on me, it doesn’t make any sense

I live in the water and also on the land.  Basking in the sun without meaning.

我在梦里，在你怀里，我在草里非常隐蔽

I’m in the dream,also in your arms,I’m cracking coverd by the grassland
In your dreams, in your embrace, I am well hidden in the grass.
飘在水上，一切正常，咀嚼着泥，我很忧伤

It’s fine floating on the water, I’m sadly chewing the mud
Floating on the water's surface, everything's normal as I ponder in sadness.
趴在树上，并不惊慌，很长很长时间才会死亡
I’m Unflappable on the trees , and will die through long long time

I climb the trees without fear, for a long long time I will not die.

才会死亡
And will die

After that, will I then I die.
我一步一步走向明天，我一夜一夜的睡眠

I walk to tomorrow step by step,I sleep night by night

Step but step, I journey into tomorrow, Night after night I shall sleep.

一句一句把话说完，永远失去了昨天

I speak up word by word,and lost yesterday forever

As my words are done, yesterday is lost forever to me.

总有一天都化作云烟，不可能再有人世间

Always have one day everything will flow down,and no the earth anymore

They will be a day when everything turns into mist, nary will there be an earth anymore.
瞪大的双眼看看月亮，仍然高挂在云上

Goggle at the moon,(it) still hanging in the clouds
Glaring at the moon that is still hanging high

也飘在水上
And floating on the water

So too like me floating on the water's surface.

First of all, 我 = I.  No exceptions.  So you need to correct them yourself.  I have looked at your English translation and there are some sentences I cannot understand at all.  So therefore trying to correct it in the best light would be quite pointless.  If you can provide the original Chinese text, I can do a better job in helping you.

waiting for help ——i need to know where i've made syntax errors（English）

Hi everybody,i've translated a chinese song into english,and i need to know where i've made syntax errors (words and grammar),waiting for your help .^^.
thanks a lot.

《Cold-blooded animal》

I’m in the water,also on the land,sun shines on me, it doesn’t make any sense
I’m in the dream,also in your arms,I’m cracking coverd by the grassland
It’s fine floating on the water, I’m sadly chewing the mud
I’m Unflappable on the trees , and will die through long long time
And will die
I walk to tomorrow step by step,I sleep night by night
I speak up word by word,and lost yesterday forever
Always have one day everything will flow down,and no the earth anymore
Goggle at the moon,(it) still hanging in the clouds
And floating on the water