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I Dreamt of You I had a dream last night, many faces soft like the flower petals, happy faces those are, surrounded with joy and cackles, dancing in bright colours under the starful sky. Among them, One was sad and monotonous, surrounded in white. Golden her locks, silence her talks. Why are you so sad?, I asked. She wried and said, for me here now, none, nothing; I am gradually dying... I recognized then, she was goodness of the human being.

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I Dreamt of You

I had a dream last night,
many faces soft like the flowery 1 petals,
happy faces that these are,
surrounded with joys and cackles,
dancing in bright colours under the starful starry sky.
Among them, One was sad and monotonous,
surrounded in white.
Golden are her locks,
silence is her voice talks.
Why are you so sad?, I asked.
She wried wept and said,
for me to be here now with none and nothing;
I am gradually dying...
I recognized then,
she was the goodness of the human beings.

Great thoughts and imagery.  Now I shall steal your idea and express it in my style.

Last night of thee I dreamt,

Amongst the faces of flowery fair,

Happy faces that these are,

Amid in joys and laughter for I care,

Swirling in colors vying with the starry sky,

There you stood alone in sadness laying bare.

Surrounded in white,

Golden are your locks,

Silence is your voice.

"Why such sorrow?" I ask in stare,

You wept,

You said,

I am here.

I am nothing,

I exist soon in your prayers!

I recognize then,

The dying goddess that she was...
Of mankind goodness that we pare.

1.  Nothing wrong but I just added an extra sound to keep with the rhythm.

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beautyful=)
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Thanks KG and Christine for your worthy complements and inspirations.
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This one's sensible and more imaginative.
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Beautiful language! Just a little bit too sad. Why?

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