My Hometown

My hometown It is a small but peaceful place. I was born in there and growing up in lived there until I was 18 my eighteenth year.  In my heart,I think it a special place for me There is always a special place in my heart for my hometown.  Everyone here seems to know everyone.  nearly seems like know each other.They will always smile to everyone when all they meet.  They like to chat and talk about funny things and especially about playing cards mahjong1.  When a As each new day comes, you can see many restaurants are full of filled with people.There is a kind of breakfast we love, it is called named "Niurou Mifen" (牛肉米粉) or simply beef soup vermicelli.  It is very famous popular and dilicious. delicious.

My home town hometown gives me a feeling like living with a big family;  bringing a  sense of comfortable and a happy life to me.

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1.  I am only guessing here.  I can't imagine the whole town like Las Vegas gambling on cards.

My home town Hometown

It is was a small, but peaceful place. There I was born in there and growing grew up in there until I wasto the age of 18 eighteen.
In my heart, I think consider it a special place for me. Nearly everyone nearly seems seemed to like know each other. They will always smiled to everyone when they meet met and talked about funny different things, especially about playing cards. When a new day comes came, you can could see many resterants restaurants are full of people. There is was a kind of well-known breakfast dish named called Niurou Mifen rice with beef 牛肉米饭 that was is very famous and dilicious delicious.
My home town hometown gives gave me a feeling like a big family, bringing a comfortable and happy life to me.