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Practising Yoga：瑜伽练习：

2 Two 1 years ago, I thought I’d like to learn Yoga, but for all kinds of reason, I am n’t not  did not start learn it untill until the middle of this July.

2年前，我想着要学习瑜伽，但因为种种原因，只到今年7月中我才开始学习它。

Up to now, I have been prastised practising yoga for a total of 45 hours at the gymclub.  I feel that I am making a progress day by day and the movements is standard more and more,are getting perfect.  I also feel that yoga brings me benefited me very much.2  Head is not ache,attention span focus on it more than before. No more headaches and my concentration is getting better.

至今，我已在俱乐部里练习了45个小时。我感觉到自己一天天在进步，动作也越来越标准了。我也体会到了瑜伽给我带来的益处，头不痛了，注意力也比以前集中了很多。

From the standpoint of a beginner, it is very important to persist in one's practice of yoga.   Insisting in practising yoga is very important for a beginner,it is as same as It is the same in learning other knowledage and skills。Even if a simple action for a simple movement, maintaining it just for ten  it is not easy to insist in doing it for 10 seconds is not an easy thing to do. For making a progress,we have to focus on spirit to pracise it step by step. Only if we concentrate and practise it, then real progress is achieved.

对于一个初学者来说，坚持练习瑜伽是很重要的，如同学习其它知识和技能一样。即使是一个简单的动作，坚持10秒都不是件容易的事。唯有集中精神一步步坚持练习它，我们才能取得进步。

I am gratified that I can stick to my practice it, and listening to the my inner voice of my body and heart,,doing my best to make the actation more standard to achieve the perfection of the techniques.

我很欣慰我能坚持练习它，倾听自己的身体和心灵的声音，并尽可能地使动作更标准。

The teacher said, “You make a good are progressing fast”.  What she said Her words encouraged me very much. Actually, during about 2 months,I had 2 two lessons in two months.  which is difficult For a beginner the classes were very difficult for me. However, I was doing made it much better than what I thought. I was overjoyed by the result of these experiences stimulate me2.I believe,I will make big great progress soon.

老师说“你进步很快”，这句话鼓励了我。事实上，2个月内，我参加了2堂对一个初学者来说很难的课程，但我做到的远比我想到的要好很多。这两次经历也令我大受到鼓舞，我相信：很快，我一定会取得更大的进步。

Learning dance can improve body flexibility.  Recently, I found discovered that Indian dancing has some share similar qualities with Yoga. I am getting more interested in it.  Indian dance more and more.Learning Indian dances must be helpful for prastising would be great in complement Yoga.  Now I have to start to study learning some basic action of Indian dance movements.

学习舞蹈可以提高身体的柔韧性.近来，我发现印度舞与瑜伽有着某种相通之处，我对印度舞也越来越感兴趣了。学习印度舞一定对瑜伽会有所帮助。现在我开始学习印度舞的一些基本的动作了。

I do hope I can learn yoga and dance Indian dancing well as soon as possible. Now, I enjoy very much in the happiness of practising Yoga very much.

我希望我能尽可能快地学好瑜伽和舞蹈。现在，我非常享受学习瑜伽的快乐。

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Practising Yoga：瑜伽练习：

2 years ago,I thought I’d like to learn Yoga,but for all kinds of reason,I amn’t learn it untill middle of this July.

Two years ago, I thought I’d like to learn Yoga ,but for all kinds of reason, I couldn’t/didn't learn it until the middle of this July.

2年前，我想着要学习瑜伽，但因为种种原因，只到今年7月中我才开始学习它。

Up to now ,I have prastised yoga for 45 hours at the club.I feel I am making a progress day by day and the movement is standard more and more,I also feel yoga brings me benefit.Head is not ache,attention span focus on it more than before.

Up to now, I have practised yoga for 45 hours at the club. I feel I am making  progress day by day and my movement are becoming more and more standard, I also feel yoga brings me benefits as my head does not ache  and my attention span is more focussed than before.

至今，我已在俱乐部里练习了45个小时。我感觉到自己一天天在进步，动作也越来越标准了。我也体会到了瑜伽给我带来的益处，头不痛了，注意力也比以前集中了很多。

Insisting in practising yoga is very important for a beginner,it is as same as learning other knowledage and skills。Even if a simple action,it is not easy to insist in doing it for 10 seconds.For making a progress,we have to focus on spirit to pracise it step by step.

Persistence in practising yoga is very important for a beginner, just like learning other knowledge and skills。Even if a simple action, it is not easy to persist in doing it for 10 seconds. To make progress, we have to focus on the spirit to practise it step by step.
对于一个初学者来说，坚持练习瑜伽是很重要的，如同学习其它知识和技能一样。即使是一个简单的动作，坚持10秒都不是件容易的事。唯有集中精神一步步坚持练习它，我们才能取得进步。

I am gratified I can stick to practise it,listening to the voice of my body and heart,,doing my best to make the actation more standard.

I am gratified I can stick to practise, listening to the voice of my body and heart and doing my best to make the action more standard.

我很欣慰我能坚持练习它，倾听自己的身体和心灵的声音，并尽可能地使动作更标准。

The teacher said “you make a good progress”.What she said encourages me.Actually,during about 2 months,I had 2 lessons which is difficult for a beginner.I made it much better than what I thought.These experiences stimulate me.I believe,I will make big progress soon.

The teacher said “You have made good progress”. What she said encourages me as during about 2 months, I had only two lessons which is difficult for a beginner. I made much better  progress than I thought I would and these experiences stimulate me. I believe I will make greater progress soon.

老师说“你进步很快”，这句话鼓励了我。事实上，2个月内，我参加了2堂对一个初学者来说很难的课程，但我做到的远比我想到的要好很多。这两次经历也令我大受到鼓舞，我相信：很快，我一定会取得更大的进步。

Learning dance can improve body flexibility .Recently,I found Indian dance has some similar with Yoga.I am interested in Indian dance more and more.Learning Indian dance must be helpful for prastising Yoga.Now I start to study some basic action of Indian dance.

Learning dance can improve body flexibility. Recently, I found Indian dance has some similarity with Yogi so I am more and more interested in Indian dance. Learning Indian dance must be helpful for practising Yoga and now I am  starting to study some basic actions of Indian dance.
学习舞蹈可以提高身体的柔韧性.近来，我发现印度舞与瑜伽有着某种相通之处，我对印度舞也越来越感兴趣了。学习印度舞一定对瑜伽会有所帮助。现在我开始学习印度舞的一些基本的动作了。

I do hope I can learn yoga and dance well as soon as possible. Now,I enjoy the happiness of practising Yoga very much.

I do hope I can learn yoga and be ablle to dance well as soon as possible. Now, I enjoy the happiness of practising Yoga very much.
我希望我能尽可能快地学好瑜伽和舞蹈。现在，我非常享受学习瑜伽的快乐。

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