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OBESITY EPIDEMIC IN BRITAIN Obesity is considered to be as an epidemic in the Eastern world. Official figures released some months ago in Great Britain showed that, a record 20.2 per cent of youngsters were obese by the time they left primary school and the gap between rich and poor children who were overweight was widening. Undoubtedly, Britain is among the heaviest of wealthy countries and this comes, of course, at the expense of the public health status. But obesity is not only a dangerous public health threat that leads to a string of serious illnesses, but also harms the national Economy: the cost to the NHS of treating obesity means that every person in the UK pays an extra £409 in taxes a year, and the economic output loss is the equivalent to 944.000 missing full-time workers. For this reason, Government’s officials have taken action in order to tackle obesity by implementing anti-obesity policies, which goal is both to halt the rise in obesity for future generations and benefit economies. What was supposed to generate agreement among the general public, has caused uproar in a large number of population, though. The reason: a controversial measure adopted consisted on a ban on eating and drinking on public transport, especially on the trains. On the one hand, those who have to spend an entire day travelling on the train are completely against for obvious reasons. On the other hand, many people argue that this is not the real problem, as the bulk of snacking by children takes place in the back seats of family cars and not in public transport. Personally speaking, I think that this is just the tip of the iceberg, and who need to be controlled are not the people who travels, but the products and the marketing. All in all, the Government has recognized the magnitude of the obesity problem in the British society, and this is why they have taken concrete actions to fight against. In my opinion however, more radical measures are needed.

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OBESITY EPIDEMIC IN BRITAIN

Obesity is considered to be as an epidemic in the Eastern (Eastern or Western?) world. Official figures released some months ago in Great Britain showed that, a record 20.2 per cent of youngsters were obese by the time they left primary school and the gap between rich and poor children who were overweight was widening. Undoubtedly, Britain is among the heaviest of wealthy countries and this comes, of course, at the expense of the public health status.
But However, obesity is not only a dangerous public health threat that leads to a string of serious illnesses, but also harms the national economy: the cost to the NHS of treating obesity means that every person in the UK pays an extra £409 in taxes a year, and the economic output loss is the equivalent to 944.000 missing full-time workers.
For this reason, Government officials have taken action in order to tackle obesity by implementing anti-obesity policies, the goal of which is to both halt the rise in obesity for future generations and benefit economies.
What was supposed to generate agreement among the general public, has caused uproar in a large number of the population, though. The reason: a controversial measure adopted consisted of a ban on eating and drinking on public transport, especially on the trains.
On the one hand, those who have to spend an entire day travelling on the train are completely against it for obvious reasons. On the other hand, many people argue that this is not the real problem, as the bulk of snacking by children takes place in the back seats of family cars and not on public transport.
Personally speaking, I think that this is just the tip of the iceberg, and those who need to be controlled are not the people who travel, but the products and the marketing.
All in all, the Government has recognized the magnitude of the obesity problem in the British society, and this is why they have taken concrete actions to fight against it. In my opinion, however, more radical measures are needed.

Hola Mar, lo has escrito muy bien.
Government officials - government aquí es un adjetivo.
"which goal" - cuál objetivo. No.
Cuidado con el artículo "the". Trains and British society en general, así que no hace falta el artículo.
Siempre, en los modos de transporte, vamos "on" - excepto los coches - in.
"People" es plural, así que who travel.
Espero que eso te ayude. Saludos, Simón.
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OBESITY EPIDEMIC IN BRITAIN

Obesity is considered to be an epidemic in the Eastern world. Official figures released some months ago in Great Britain showed that, a record 20.2 per cent of youngsters were obese by the time they left primary school and the gap between rich and poor children who were overweight was widening. Undoubtedly, Britain is among the heaviest of wealthy countries and this comes, of course, at the expense of the public health status.
But obesity is not only a public health threat that leads to a string of serious illnesses, but also harms the national Economy: the cost to the NHS of treating obesity means that every person in the UK pays an extra £409 in taxes a year, and the economic output loss is the equivalent to 944.000 missing full-time workers.
For this reason, Government’s officials have taken action in order to tackle obesity by implementing anti-obesity policies, which aims to both halt the rise in obesity for future generations and benefit economies.
What was supposed to generate agreement among the general public, has caused uproar in a large number of the population, the reason being due to a controversial measure consisting of a ban on eating and drinking on public transport, especially on the trains.
On the one hand, those who have to spend an entire day travelling on the train are completely against this for obvious reasons. However, many people argue that this is not the real problem, as the bulk of snacking is done by children in the back seat of family cars and not on public transport.
Personally speaking, I think that this is just the tip of the iceberg, and those who need to be controlled are not the people who travel, but the products and the marketing.
All in all, the Government has recognized the magnitude of the obesity problem in British society, and this is why they have taken stern actions to fight against it. In my opinion however, more radical measures are needed.
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EPIDEMIC IN BRITAIN Obesity is considered to be as an epidemic in the Eastern (Western?) world. Official figures released some months ago in Great Britain showed that, a record 20.2% (per cent) of youngsters were obese by the time they left primary school and that the gap between rich and poor children who were overweight was widening too. Undoubtedly, Britain is among the heaviest wealthy countries with the worst obesity problems and this comes, of course, at the expense of the it’s public health status. But obesity is not only a dangerous public health threat that leads to a string of serious illnesses, but it also harms the national Economy. The cost to the NHS of treating obesity means that every person in the UK pays an extra £409 in taxes a year, and the loss to economic output loss is the equivalent to 944,000 missing full-t. For this reason, Government’s officials have taken action in order to tackle obesity by implementing anti-obesity policies, which whose goal is to both to halt the rise in obesity for future generations and benefit the economy economies. What was supposed to generate agreement among the general public, has however caused uproar from in a large number portion of population though. The reason: a controversial measure was adopted that consisted on a banned on eating and drinking on public transport, especially on the trains. On the one hand, those who have to spend an entire day travelling on the train are completely against this for obvious reasons. On the other hand, many people argue that this is not the real problem, as the bulk of snacking by children takes place in the back seats of family cars and not in on public transport. Personally speaking, I think that this is just the tip of the iceberg, and those who need to be controlled are not the people who travels travelling public , but those responsible for the products and the their marketing. All in allI. In summary, the Government has recognized the magnitude of the obesity problem
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Good for you James. These figures have been taken from The Times, October 11 2019. Nothing that I had invented.
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I think I live in a different Britain to the one you describe.

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