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Day 5: A different experience Once upon a time, there was a girl (me) who spoke and wrote English much better than today and lived in Australia. That girl was doing exchange program in Melbourne and before come back to her country, she would like to have a radical experience. So, she thought why not do skydiving?? What a experience! But she didn't want to do that in Australia, she would like to have this experience in Queenstown, New Zealand. Here I had a tip for you when you go travelling. If you arrive in the city and the day is perfect even if you are tired, take pictures, take a lot of pictures, because the other day can be very horrible, you know, it can be rainning. This happend to me. :( Luckly I took some pictures when I got there. :) I was worried about that rain because after somedays I was going to another city and my skydiving was scheduled. When the big day came, it was not raining, it was a sunny day, but very windy. Of course, they had to cancel my skydiving. As I said before, I really wanted to do something remarkable, so when I came back to Australia I scheduled another skydiving. Guess what happened? Again, the big day came and the weather was not helping. I was thinking that maybe it was a sign to give up, but before, I called the agency and they said to go because the weather would be ok. So, I trusted them and I went with my friend, I was very afraid in that time. When I got in the place, for my surprise, the weather was beautiful! It was Valentine's Day in Australia and there was a couple with me in the airplane. I jumped first, I didn't want that, it was so fast, I didn't have time to think. It was like, "it is your turn now, go" hahahah It was cool, really nice. It can be surprise for you, but when I was in the plane my fear disappeared and I really wanted to jump, the view was amazing, I have no words to describe. It was so nice, but I didn't want to do it again, the pictures and the video to remember that was enough for me. I was happy until the guy tell me that my camera DID NOT WORK, can you believe that??? I got sad, I was happy because the experience, I was alive, but I wanted my pictures and video. :( And one week later I would be back in Brazil. My friend tried to comfort me, but I just said "I am happy, but I could be happier." My luck is that the guy who worked in the agency overheard me and had a good heart. So, he just said "you can jump again if you like and have your photos and video". I didn't think twice, for sure, so I did it again! :P

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Day 5: A different experience

Once upon a time, there was a girl (me) who spoke and wrote English much better than she does today and lived in Australia.
That girl was doing an exchange program in Melbourne and before come going back to her country, she would like wanted to have a radical experience. So, she thought why not do skydiving?? What an experience! But she didn't want to do that in Australia, she would like wanted to have this experience in Queenstown, New Zealand. Here I had have a tip for you when you go travelling. If you arrive in the city and the day is perfect even if you are tired, take pictures, take a lot of pictures, because the other next day can may be very horrible, you know, it can be rainning. This happened to me. :( Luckily I took some pictures when I got there. :) I was worried about that rain because after some days I was going to another city and my skydive was scheduled. When the big day came, it was not raining, it was a sunny day, but very windy. Of course, they had to cancel my skydive. As I said before, I really wanted to do something remarkable, so when I came went back to Australia I scheduled another skydiving jump (to avoid repeating "skydive" again). Guess what happened? Again, the big day came and the weather was not helping. I was thinking that maybe it was a sign to give up, but before first, I called the agency and they said to go because the weather would be ok. So, I trusted them and I went with my friend, I was very afraid in at that time. When I got in to the place, for to my surprise, the weather was beautiful! It was Valentine's Day in Australia and there was a couple with me in on the airplane. I jumped first, I didn't want that, it was so fast, I didn't have time to think. It was like, "it is your turn now, go" hahahah It was cool, really nice. It can may be come as a surprise for to you, but when I was in on the plane my fear disappeared and I really wanted to jump, the view was amazing, I have no words to describe it. It was so nice, but I didn't want to do it again, the pictures and the video to remember it by, that was enough for me. I was happy until the guy tell told me that my camera DID NOT WORK, can you believe that??? I got This made me sad, I was happy because of the experience, I was alive, but I wanted my pictures and video. :( And one week later I would be back in Brazil. My friend tried to comfort me, but I just said "I am happy, but I could be happier." My luck is that Luckily for me the guy who worked in the agency overheard me and had a good heart. So, he just said "you can jump again if you like and have your photos and video". I didn't think twice, for sure, so I did it again! :P

Great story Mayara! I really liked it!
Note that my comments are based on the way we speak English in the USA.

Bons estudos!

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