Space tourism
Hello, please let me know if there are any mistakes and also how would native speakers write it.
Dear brother,
Gonna give you an update on an interesting activity I managed to find. Space tourism! It costs only a few dozens of millions to get into orbit. This is where I am right now. This is much better than sitting in a classroom where I stressed or bored. I'm with my business partner and we are both having fun. By the way, I think a great opportunity for profit emerges. I'll send you details in the next message. Stay fresh
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Dear brother,
I would like to give you an update about an interesting activity I managed to do, Space Tourism! believe you or not, but this is where I am right now. My business partner also came and we are having such a good time. To be honest, being up here far from the earth, looking into space is so much better and relaxing than sitting in a classroom where I get always stressed or bored. Nevertheless, I think we got a great opportunity for profit emerges by promoting tourism. I'll keep you posted. Stay tuned.
*** Hey man, what's up? You made it very well but I've corrected some mistakes you made like adding too much "and" to connect the ideas and also some words to seem more like a native. Anyways, this is what I would write it. Hope it helps ***
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Space tourism
Hello, please let me know if there are any mistakes and also how would native speakers write it?
Dear brother,
Gonna* give you an update on an interesting activity I managed to find. Space tourism! It costs only a few dozens of millions to go into orbit. This is where I am right now. This is much better than sitting in a classroom stressed or bored. I'm with my business partner and we are both having fun. By the way, I think a great opportunity for profit emerges. I'll send you details in the next message. Stay fresh.
*I dunno, but I reckon that some people will write like this colloquially. Formally, or in an exam, "gonna" would be deprecated. The rest of the essay is exam-good.
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